Do I need any improvements to my story

[Asriel Dreemurr]

Thanks. I'm actually in the process of rebooting it, so a few pointers would be great. Also, I'm thinking of removing the parody element of the Ultimate Omnitrix story by DIZILLA where someone from the original Teen Titans television show gets an Omnitrix from Ben 10. The idea is starting to feel gimmicky, but I just might revise the idea so only a few Titans get it. Maybe even the people at the East Tower!