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[Storyteller]

Gildarts' judgement

you both are spectacular and I love you. That is all. -Gildarts

Adam

"Description and Clarity: 3

And sooner or later the universe was going to get its shit together and remember he wasn't a Light player, and then he was going to get the most angry of smites thrown down on his petulant little head from some random, upset deity.

This phrase got a little wordy. That’s not to say I didn’t like it, but it lasts three lines with only one/two commas, just keep an eye on things like that. That said, I liked your word choice, and felt really connected with what you were trying to say, and the point that came off to me.

Or, y'know...don't approach that casually.

When speaking in dialogue, it can be hard to describe tone mid-sentence, unless you break to narrate. I like to suggest a small inclusion of italics on just the word “don’t” because that’s how I would picture what I picture as adam and his personality, saying/warning some stranger to not sneak up on him. This was very minor, and dont worry, I wouldn’t take off points for something like this, but its something to keep in mind for the future.

One of Adam's eyebrows quirked up and his mouth all but fell open into a very confused expression of wonder, and more than a little clearly evident shock.

So far your sentence structure has been consistent, but keep an eye on the sentences like the above. We’re all guilty of run on sentences, and I think this one needs a comma and some slight modifying.

I could see it improved as the below, however, I am noting how borderline your word limit is, and I feel yo’ pain, I imagine you probably had to delete a little bit or modify it. As I was reading, I felt the... I don’t want to say quality of one sentence, but it started very fluent, and I felt like the change to get to the end of the sentence was almost dramatic, rather than a steady-gradual decline. It felt a bit missing, here’s a small suggestion.

One of Adam's eyebrows quirked up while his mouth all but fell open into a very confused expression of wonder. Traces of shock could be seen protruding from...”

I separated the last little bit, as it heeded the flow. No biggy, but sometimes extra words aren’t always enhancing to the story, or the sentence. I felt like you were definitely trying to display the shock as part of his emotion. Instead, I would like to mention that shock can also be felt. You already showed the reader the expression on his face. Now let the reader feel adam’s tingling sense of dread, or startled determination.

Without wasting any more breath, Adam snatched his preferred weapon of choice — his concealed rifle — from its place resting on his back, like some gratuitously oversized sword, and swung it around to point in his foe's general direction.

THIS WAS ON POINT. Nice hyphen, and I felt like it fit the sentence well too.

Adam's lamentation over his unsuccessful no-scope attempt was brought to a screeching halt as he was presented with the sight of what he could recognize only as a ball of fire and bad things, inches from his face.

I felt like instead of lamentation, you could’ve said that Adam “lamented” as a verb, and it may have flowed just a bit better.

The initial impact of the blow to his cheek had left the entire side of his face nearly numb

The choice of the word “initial” makes it so you didn’t have to use “had” in front of left. It adds an extra word, and heeds the flow of the sentence, subtly.

Any trace of pride or joy vanished from his demeanor as he tried to ignore the splitting ache in his skull. He turned around to face his opponent only to find the sorcerer now with a very familiar-looking implement in one hand. "Well, well. It appears we have a weapon in common." The crackling hiss of ignition and the red glow of the blade brought a scowl of indignation to Adam's face, and his eyes instinctively followed the glowing mass of energy as the sorcerer flourished it.

"Well great. Fantastic. Look at that. We both have the same weapon. Super."

two things in the above, the first was I wasn’t sure due to the way this paragraph as lead into, who was saying this, and then the repetition and parroting seemed unneeded. If you were insistent on having shang say that, I think instead of weapon, adam could’ve referenced the Ligthsaber as just that, or something really cool and kind of introduce your own/ a new description to it.

That said, I really liked the passion of what came next. “Adam could practically taste the venom in his own words.”

Now all I can do is this level of shit." And then his saber flashed, a flare of vermillion that clashed against the matching blade of his opponent. Adam rebounded from the strike, spinning on one heel and brought in a second strike from the opposite direction."And that? Well that just makes me kinda mad, y'know?"

powerful word choice

He'd been suspecting it from the very beginning, in the back of his head. But now it had been shoved, aggressively and in a fashion most impossible to ignore, right in his face. This guy wasn't like the other people he'd been shoved into a fight against. This guy was out for blood. And he had more than enough tricks to spill it.

For the beginning of this part, I would have thought a greater impact of this point could have been delivered by showing the reader this. In the post above, Shang was really menacing. I felt like just a little bit of placement, and the feeling could really grow in the reader’s mind. For example:

He had suspected from the very beginning, in the back of his mind, the suspicion had been growing (all along).

I really liked how you followed your sentence up though, which is why I included it as part of this quote. It was strong, and demanded to be heard. Very reinforcing to the referenced suspicion.

Already having regained his feet, the crimson blade of the monk's energy saber arced up, clearly intending to bat aside the winded child's blade. But his blade met only empty air.

This sentence could’ve had a little more force behind it, with the last part, it seemed a little weak considering how strongly the previous sentence started. To better reinforce things like this in the future, placement or taking a word out can help make the difference.

“But his blade met only empty air.” 
 I imagined my heart leaping to my throat when I slip. In battle something like this miscalculation could mean death to shang. I felt the gentle omission gave Adam an enforced edge.

But Shang didn't get much of a chance to lay eyes on that, or much of anything else. All he got was a blur of red and gray as Adam flipped forward into an axe kick, the heel of his foot colliding with the bridge of the monk's nose.

really nicely put

And dozens of laser bolts hissed ominously at Shang.

I would alter the placement just lightly.

“And dozens of laser bolts ominously hissed toward Shang.” I may not keep “toward” after a second look, but that’s why I write it out.

I think placing ominously before hissed, or before laser bolts gives the adjective more purpose, because we don’t want it to take place of the verb “hissed” that you chose.


Overall, I felt like you could’ve done better in this category. While I didn’t struggle to visualize your concept and actions, I felt like with a few minor modifications, the sentences could really shine. If you ever want any advice or a brief look over, I would be truly honored. Other than that, keep shining.

Voice: 4.5

Honestly it was a major surprise. Everyone he'd been put up against so far seemed like they had the advantage every time. Lack of fucks to give. Overwhelming size and quantity of weapons.

your voice started out very strong and well pronounced.

The bolt of red laser fire that spewed out of the barely-concealed barrel of the firearm missed him by inches as he stepped aside and ducked low.

In this sentence, if we sans the word limit, I felt like while it was well-pronounced, I felt like there was a small amount of room to work with to make the sentence really shine. This kind of thing doesn’t have to be with fancy words or even elite visualization. Your voice was really strong in the first half of your first post, and I felt it fade a little bit, even though that was the part that “hooked” me in.

But dazed as he was, his glasses knocked askew as they were, he still had the mental capacity for a smirk to curl at his lips. The barrel of his cleverly-concealed contraption spit out a burst of red sparks, crackling with a hum of built-up energy, and a blade of focused energy lanced out. The sorcerer was forced to shift his grip, shoving the weapon out to one side to avoid taking the sudden attack straight through the side, and Adam capitalized on the chance.

His free hand darted behind his back, and with only the hissing hum of ignition in the frigid air as warning, the crimson blade of his lightsaber flashed around in an underhand strike at the former monk's arm. As Adam had hoped he might, the much larger man's grip on the weapon released and only a glancing blow was struck across his forearm.

I felt like a lot more thought and effort was put into the gentle flow of the overall round this time. Nice word choice, it’s effect was really flattering to your style, and had a great impact on me.

"Man, I gotta ask..." Trying to ignore the pain and the cold biting at him in just shy of equal measure, he focused his blurred eyesight on what he sincerely hoped was the sorcerer. "How many more damn tricks do you have up your sleeves?"

Your last post was very strong, and your voice is one of my favorite things about your writing.

But right now he had an angry kombatant to deal with.

did you just... reinforce your reference to mortal combat from earlier? I almost didn’t catch it. That was awesome.

The man was solid, and to his credit didn't get completely smashed into the frozen ground as Adam had been expecting — and kind of hoping for, in all honesty — but merely sent staggering and reeling from the impact, more blood flying freely from his face.

Excellent

And as Adam landed, it was gingerly, and favoring one leg. Add one more thing to my ever-growing list of bright ideas. He grimaced all but hopping on one leg as he clipped his lightsaber back to his belt. "You just hold tight right there, now. I got something special for ya." And immediately as he spoke, the air around him blazed with a red glow. His eyes blazed with the same shade of red, whether a reflection or emanating from them it was impossible to tell. He raised his hands up in focus, bands of red light in a rainbow of shades erupting from the ground at his feet and spinning about his position.

This paragraph was stunningly done.

OVERALL: This was your strongest category. So I have a few things to say. My favorite post, and your strongest was the last. I felt you really hit your groove. You kept me reading, and wanting to know about Adam and his character. I felt he was relatable and funny, and I really just loved how at ease he was. Throughout the entire battle, he was a delight to hear from, and I loved how you incorporated the dialogue into something with consequence.




Character: 3.5

Okay. Focus, Adam. Focus. You got this, man. You are literally a god. Lost some power, yeah, but the principle stands. You beat the shit out of a green lumberjack miner person, a giant bucket of rust and weapons, and some scary ass lady who didn't know what the fuck she was on about.

This self-counseling sesh helped to set me in Adam’s mind, as well as I just found it relatable. When gearing up against someone, especially as notable as shang might be, (just to stand next to) I thought it plausible, realistic, and that helped to establish a good connection with the reader and the character.

Adam stumbling blindly, his world turned upside down. "Fhhk..." he wheezed, barely resisting the urge to fall to his knees. Why did these people always go for the HEAD.

Why indeed? This part had me laughing.

"You're really kind of a jackass, y'know. Hitting a kid with glasses. In the face. You have any idea how much harder that makes this?" Almost immediately he waves one hand dismissively. "No wait don't answer that. Just remembered I don't really give a shit."

Adam’s sarcasm. You really pull it off. I felt like the dialogue was really nice here, and that it gave you a good advantage over your opponent, as well as just didn’t have to be explained with a thorough reason littered with the five W’s for the reader to understand what was to be taken from it. Adam’s a great character, and I like how his words have consequence.

”Nope. Not quick enough, man."

This was a nice play, and I felt it combatted how 1 adam was regarded as a kid and 2 how OLD immortal ol’ shang really is.
Nice.

OVERALL: Good work in this category. Your voice and Adam’s character really give you you a strength in your writing. I also felt like you did nicely to overlap Adam’s character with a bit of story. I liked Adam’s witty banter. In the future, I’d like to have a stronger indicator of not quite how he was feeling, but some simple fundamentals of his personality that could’ve been pushed a bit more. You still did wonderfully in this category,

Story: 4.5

Pointedly ignoring the caches of weapons behind him, preferring instead to stick to what he knew best, Adam took off at a brisk jog across the frosty ground, clambering none too gracefully up a mound of snow. "Damn I hate the cold..." he muttered to himself, letting out a puff of effort as he reached the twenty foot peak. "I'll take it over the heat, though," he continued halfheartedly, peering through the snow-filled air to try and land eyes on his opponent.

"I'm not overly fond of the cold, myself."

The sudden speech caught Adam off guard and he practically jumped out of his skin.

This part was really entertaining, and the subtle way you set it up, I didn’t see it coming, and I really liked it because it, to me, showed you incorporated some knowledge of Shang you had, and his... ‘effect’ on people.

Any trace of pride or joy vanished from his demeanor as he tried to ignore the splitting ache in his skull. He turned around to face his opponent only to find the sorcerer now with a very familiar-looking implement in one hand.

This part nicely promoted the continuing growth of the post.

over the shattered husk of more planets than he could count, and used his only friends' corpses as a stairway to reach the final door. He had won, damn it. He deserved some peace and quiet. He deserved to finally let it all just....fucking be over.

I CRAVED seeing the emotion and motive behind Adam’s resolution. This was a great inclusion, and it arrived at a good point and was well-paced.

"You're really kind of a jackass, y'know. Hitting a kid with glasses. In the face. You have any idea how much harder that makes this?" Almost immediately he waves one hand dismissively. "No wait don't answer that. Just remembered I don't really give a shit."

One step forward and Adam flickeres again, two steps forward and he disappeared again, bolting across the short distance between himself and the former monk in the space of a heartbeat. "S'up." He paused for just long enough to more than telegraph his attack, before making an almost lazy swipe with his blade. Take the bait. Take it.

I really liked how you included the strategic aspect of it. It complimented your side and voice of the story well, but also, I haven’t been able to see a lot of it pulled off successfully, so I just wanted to mention how well I felt it was done.

Glaring at the child, bloodied teeth clenched in irritation at his petulance, the former monk regained his feet. "Special, is it? How fascinating."

"You're god damn right." And then Adam thrust both palms outward, toward the sorcerer. The face of a clock appeared, the shade matching the bright red gear emblazoned on Adam's chest. And it, along with the flow of time, shattered.

would it be considered sarcastic to call this bonding? <3

Conclusion: this category was about even for the both of you. Nice job, and good demonstration of all your dialogue. It gave you a slight edge.

Grammar and Spelling: 3

Damn....didn't know I was signing up for mortal kombat when I got into this.

You did things like this a couple of times. I like to visualize “didn’t” as a space away from the stylistic ellipsis, and also capitalized. It’s dialogue, but it’s still important for the reader on account of fluidity. I’m not super worried about things like this when it comes to grammar, but I thought this was the category for me to voice small modifications that I would not only make to my own writing, but would also like to see.

barely-concealed

I didn’t feel like the hyphen was super necessary here

Just DONE SOMETHING to not leave himself so completely unprepared and blind for this entire ordeal.

While I see that you used italics twice in this paragraph above, I think emphasis could have been applied to these words without caps. I also want to voice I recognize it as a stylistic choice, and I’m not going to infringe your right to emphasize it your way, I just feel that during a fight, style including font should be conscious.

He was literally a god of Time.

I would capitalize “God” or not capitalize and add an italic to the word time.

It would look like this, as a sample: “He was literally a god of [/i]time[/i].”

But no. He was blind, just like any other little shit.

While I can hear your narration and voice very well in this statement, also warn to not start a sentence like that with a but, unless you wanted to put it in italics, which would imply a separate/stream of thought.

Adam rebounded from the strike, spinning on one heel and brought in a second strike from the opposite direction."And that? Well that just makes me kinda mad, y'know?"

easy to miss, but there was no space right there. Also, your word count is the same on something like that. I double checked. Word counter is truly an elite tool.

One step forward and Adam flickeres again

this should be flickers

He was doing his damnedest not to show just how exhausted he was already getting. How heavy his breathing was.How much he was shivering from pain and cold.

space again



TS: 18.5



Shang

"Description and Clarity: 4.5

Had he not paid any heed to the dwindling crowd of remaining contestants, he may have been fooled or taken aback by ‘Adam Gaite.’ Unfortunately, the sorcerer wasn’t an idiot, and try as he might, he found himself insulted that this was what he was pitted against.

You had a very strong start, and this part here was very clear an concise. It left me wanting more to know about Shang, and his perception of his opponent. I liked how the ‘quotes’ implied he was unfamiliar, and that you didn’t have to say a thing in order for the reader like me, to know that the characters had yet to be acquainted.

Shang rushed forward and lashed out with a forearm slash that soared high of its mark as the kid ducked. A quick, thrusting blow caught Adam in the chest and sent him bowling head-over-heels down the small little hill. Although he’d won the exchange, there was something that didn’t sit well with the scowling sorcerer. For a seemingly awkward and scrawny youth, Adam reacted a little too quickly. Shang had failed to notice it during their first scuffle, but he’d picked it up during their most recent exchange.

I liked how you, for the ‘ice-breaking’ action sentence, you went with something small and not too embellished. Purple always looks good on you man, but sometimes matching a previously set tempo and changing it to your own style can really achieve an overall influential effect on the story and it can -sorry adam- offer an upper hand to your own status in the fight.

Although he could barely see through the thick, wet air around him, Shang felt something wrong out to his left. With just the feeling of discomfort to go off of, he shot out a hand in time to intercept the shaft of the teen’s crutch. His fingers squeezed around the faux exterior of the laser weapon as the vapor finally started to settle, revealing an Adam on the other end of the weapon who wore a visibly unsettled expression on his visage.

Nice clarity here.

The kid went down, and he stayed there, his focus on dousing the fire that hungered for his flesh.

While I thought that this sentence was really nicely written, I also felt like the ending “hungered for his flesh” is a cool visual, and a spectacular concept, I felt like instead of hungered, something like, “craved” may have had a bit more of an immediate / directly impacting effect. Other than that, I imagined Adam’s head as one of shang’s notorious flaming skulls.

Overall: You excel with your word choice, and I could barely find anything to suggest or edit. Keep it up.

Voice: 4

On the bottom of the slope, the boy in red rose to his feet and brushed away the snow. His pale features were twisted in discomfort as he shook a few clumps out of his hair. “I just said I hate the cold and you do me like that?” He asked with a tone too close to that of a petulant teenager.

nice visual

A few feet away, Adam twirled his lightsaber and started toward Shang, his movements too fast and erratic to follow. Unbeknownst to the approaching youth, there was a faint glimmer in the sorcerer’s ensanguined palm, and as the fake child rushed in to land a fatal blow, the sorcerer fell over and threw out his blood-drenched hand.

I learned a new word today. Also, I felt like this was a good display of clarity, but also some of the way voice can incorporate with action and the display of that.

Time fractured.

One moment, the creature masquerading as a child was before him, spouting off some nonsense about special attacks.

In the next instant, Adam Gaite was in the same spot, but his posture had changed just enough to be noticeable. If that wasn’t the real giveaway, the air around Shang was filled with laser bolts that held for a brief instant before hurtling down upon him.

very powerful word choice

Even though the blasts hit, flattened out, and fizzled away, the concussive impact seeped through the barrier. Each defended bolt sent a shockwave of pain down the sorcerer’s arms, and by the time the barrage petered out, his arms had barely any sensation left in them. The limbs drooped to his sides like limp noodles as he glanced across the frozen surface to Adam Gaite.

nice use of imagery

Final thoughts: Good work.
Character: 4

A coy remark started to form in the sorcerer’s mouth, but he swallowed it whole—No games— and threw out his right palm. There was whoosh of icy air over his body before the brilliant lance of energy screamed down toward its intended quarry. The child, as Shang anticipated, escaped the path of the attack before it could bore a superheated hole through his chest. Although he’d avoided the initial blast, the force shuddered the nimble figure long enough for the sorcerer to readjust his aim.

Relatable as well, and it was a cool choice and a simple answer to avoid an entirely dialogue-based exchange.

Before Adam’s shitty little face could spit out a response, Shang belched a mouthful of flames at him. The faux human avoided the burning stream from striking him full on, but some of the fire scorched

well pronounced... “passion” from Shang

While none of the individual blasts were that strong, the amalgamated horde of blood-bombs was more than enough force to drive a stunned, battered Adam Gaite into the snow and leave him writhing as his torn flesh seethed in agony.

“Tell me how it feels.” Shang hissed as he rose from the ground.

Through blurred eyes, the youth watched as sparks of energy arced across the gruesome wounds on the sorcerer’s chest. The former monk’s right eye twitched as the heat burned shut the wounds, sealing them shut for the moment.

Although his knees wobbled, Adam made it to his feet. “Smells so terrible.”

This part was pretty sadistic/vocalized in that way. My connection with shang or rather, my comprehension of him, especially after he mentioned what sacrifice and also how he felt he has earned the right (from a thousand years) was a cool compilation. While I think I’d choose to sit in the same room as Adam instead of Shang, there’s no denying how much of a badass he is, and how clearly he’ll cut you with his gaze.

A question formed on his lips as he looked back up at the man’s eyes, which had that far-away look one would expect to find in war veterans. “You oka—”

WAS THAT CONCERN I JUST SAW? FROM SHANG TSUNG?

The sound of Adam’s voice, even as hoarse as it was, caused Shang’s blood to boil. “Thank you, snow. You are my friend.” A few yards away, the youth was on his feet, and although pillars of steam wafted up from his shoulders, chest, and face, he had regained his composure. Blisters and patches of reddened flesh dotted his once snow-white face.

This inclusion was awesome. It was subtle, but Shang’s reaction to Adam was really just lacking definition. I liked the development for his character, and I liked to see what kind of things test a millenium old chinaman.

Final thoughts: You really kept me on edge with Shang’s choices and actions. I was distinctly thrilled and absolutely loved every minute of it.

Story: 4

For an entire afternoon, the former monk had subjected himself to a cornucopia of agonies that ran the gamut from stabbings and poisonings all the way to having his ribs shattered and his skin burnt to the bone. What had this child actually endured en route to their present destination? Whatever trials he had endured, they hadn’t been enough to wholly deplete his reservoir or sarcasm, and it was that fact among all others that fouled the sorcerer’s mood.

Not part of the story you say? It was a nice recap, and I felt it was good, necessary, and helped you build for what is to come. You’ve done a good job taking careful consideration of previous suggestions and implementing them while maintaining your own style. *thumbs up*

“I spent a thousand years building my strength. One thousand years of defeated adversaries. One thousand years of victories. One thousand years of growing power.”

Oh what it all has cost him. This part was very dramatic, but it really had a good impact and I felt like it was nicely framed too.

We’re almost done here, aren’t we?” Adam muttered as he glanced over to his lightsaber.

Shang saw where he was looking and scowled. “Yes.” He muttered as he kicked the gadget across the snow to its owner. “Now pick it up.”

I was a fan of this exchange.

Then he saw the grin on Shang’s previously agonized visage…

It was that same predatory smile that he hadn’t seen since the start of their little fight.

“Bag of tricks,” the sorcerer whispered as he used his other finger to point at the air above his opponent.

Eyes widening even before he looked, Adam tilted his head back and saw the very last thing he ever wanted to see.

Nice development in the story, and it felt like a ‘finale’ moment.

As the horrible reality set into his head, the bolts crashed down onto Adam Gaite.

I feel like you are playing off of my secret love of cliff hangers. Both of you.

Conclusion: this category was even for the both of you. Nice work. If I could suggest anything to improve it, I might suggest some subtle tides of battle may be drowned out by the other character’s strengths/ or your opponent’s writing style. Don’t let them get the best of you. Shang is a great character to demonstrate this category and “character” strongly. The strong emphasis has already been established on both of these categories. They’re all placed together fluently. My final advice might be to just polish a bit, and don’t be afraid to match your opponent’s extremities. You already make it compelling, but there are parts that could be made just a bit more evident, rather than swept away in the tide of all of your ‘complete’ awesome.

You’re in for a hell of a ride.

Grammar and Spelling: 4.5

“[i}You[/i] are bitching to me about having to start from scratch?”

The dreaded bracket. Sometimes we miss things even if we hit preview, and will end up looking at the text box we are able to type into, instead of the finalized words above it.

Other than that, no complaints here. You’re an ace.

TS: 21

Winner: Shang Tsung

Good luck.

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Minato's Judgement

Adam Gaite

Description & Clarity: 4 - I think your detail and descriptions of events and scenery around you was done quite well. I never found myself overwhelmed with information. Your writing allowed me to picture everything that was going on between you and Shang. I hardly found myself needing to re-read sections or sentences to fully understand what was going on.

Voice: 4 - I mean, It’s all there. Your writing style, the way you use your distinct voice to bring out Adam’s character, It’s all there. Your dialogue is the major factor that contributes to this, but it is not the only way you express your uniqueness as a writer on this site.

Character: 4 - Adam is a little shit. Well, a sarcastic asshole if anything. But I really enjoyed this as it became a part of the fight. I think his dialogue expresses this the most, and that isn’t a bad thing. I really felt the tone in what he said. I wasn’t just reading words, I was hearing them. I was hearing how his character came across to Shang, and to the readers themselves.

Story: 4 - A solid effort. Sometimes the story is hard to get. Often one person will take the lead and the other will just follow them. But I feel like you and Shang balanced it equally, I didn’t feel as though either of you held more than 50% of the story driving at any one point. Even when you were writing as each other's characters.

Grammar & Spelling: 4.5 - A few mistakes and whatnot, but it was mostly fine. I didn’t find myself stumbling over many errors and blatant mistakes.

Total = 20.5

Shang Tsung

Description & Clarity: 4 - I mean, This was pretty much the same as What I said for Adam. You guys write in such a way that is descriptive, but also very, very clear and understandable. This is why I enjoyed reading this fight.

Voice: 4.5 - You have a very distinct writing style, and everyone knows it. You can always Identify a Proto Post. Other than small improvements to the way you write, there wasn’t much difference in this category than from your last fight.

Character: 4 - I mean, Shang is Shang. I think you bring him out quite well. I’m not finding myself reading a different character from thread to thread or post to post. You’ve got him down and I think you do really well to show us who he is, how he fights, and what he strives for.

Story: 4 - It’s pretty much the same as what I said for Adam. There’s often times where a writer will just fall in line behind a stronger writer. Since you’ve been writing for a long time, it can be quite easy for other writers to follow your lead. But in this instance, to me at least, both Adam and yourself shared the story driving equally throughout the entire fight.

Grammar & Spelling: 5 - I mean, this hasn’t changed from the other Times I’ve judged you, well done man, Well done.

Total = 21.5

Adam

Gildarts - 18.5
Minato - 20.5
Average - 19.5

Shang

Gildarts - 21
Minato - 21.5
Average - 21.25

The Winner is Shang Tsung