Official Move Approval III

[Gilgamesh]

Dust wrote:
A Pup’s Bite - 300 OM
Another basic attack of Dust’s, partially transforming his teeth. They become sharp, but no bigger than his normal teeth. This happens over a matter of seconds, but only lasts for a bite. Hit or miss, he only has a moment to take advantage of the new chompers.
-The cost for this is a simple kiss that lasts 3 seconds at least.


This move is fine but just tell me how fast it takes to transform his teeth. Also the way he activates this is a kiss if I'm correct in my reading?

The growth is quick, so... 3 seconds? "Matter of seconds" Its a quick lash move.
And Dust is a contractor, requiring a price to be paid to use any of his powers, so the more extreme trasformations will require more intense or longer kiss. Which can be done before or after, but must be performed or else his brain will explode!!

Or something.. It is never explained what happened if the price is not paid in the anime.

Alright cool then this is approved

Illusory Cacophony (Tier 1 Super Utility) - Athena takes several moments (5-10 seconds or so) to concentrate on the mind of the target. Once she has achieved focus (she cannot be actively doing anything else during this time, even semi-automatic functions such as walking), she essentially targets the sound receptors in the brain of the target, causing incredibly loud and discordant noise to explode in their mind. It sounds as if someone hit all the keys of a piano at once right next to each of the target's ears, but even louder, and it cannot be blocked out by covering their ears, since it originates inside their head. The sound starts out powerful enough to block all traces of organized thought. From there, it fades gradually, taking about 30 seconds to peter out completely. (For the first ten seconds at least, tasks such as aiming a weapon, hearing any other noises, or communicating are virtually impossible.) As soon as the sound first goes off, Athena can once again turn her attention to other matters. After the 30 seconds, there is no lasting damage to the target. (Side note: this usually even works on deaf targets: it just depends on whether the reason for their deafness is a problem with their ears, or the nerves that transmit auditory signals to their brain.)
(600 OM: Requires Ranged Attack Proficiency, Area Attack Proficiency, Debuff Proficiency, Homing Proficiency, and Telepathy)

Wait this is only used on secondaries? Why are you making it a super move? I mean you can easily make it offensive or utility if you needed. If you want something on secondaries it would just be a move.

i would try and make it less super specific and say instead like "At fist the pain is unbearable and the target loses hearing and motor functions for the next 30 seconds, however the effect slowly decays during this time." Just a suggestion.

You could also make this offensive and have it do actual damage if you wanted.

Well, it's not only for secondaries. That's the way I want to use it at first (during my next post, actually), which is why I'm buying the Area Attack Proficiency, but I'd like to be able to use it against other single PCs as well at later points (the description I wrote is when it's used on one fellow Prime, since that's how I'd use it in an official context - I imagine the effect will be much weaker on multiple targets... should I include that in the description?). Should I change it to a regular move, though? I hadn't thought of that... I'd just assumed that since it was pretty powerful and took a lot of energy, it had to be a Super Move. What do you think would be best, so I could use it both against a bunch of secondaries or a single Prime target depending on the situation? Actually, it would be nice to be able to use it on multiple Primes at once, too, come to think of it.

Okay, I made some edits to the move up there in the quote to simplify it. How's it look now? ||)

Ehhh, I have a couple reasons I'd rather keep it from actually doing damage. The way it is is fine.

Yeah i mean it could be a move if only used on secondaries but this is worthy of a super move. Just one last thing. Reduce the time of the deafening by a little cause it is only a tier one and 30 seconds is quite long.

Flamethrower Pistol (requires Area Attack Proficiency, requires Debuff Proficiency, requires Ranged Proficiency) - 600 OM


Unlike all the other weapons Ballad has at the moment, the Flamethrower Pistol is an entirely new weapon to his arsenal. It works by having a single piece of solid wick connected to the end of the barrel of the pistol, lighting it up when Ballad flicks his thumb against the bottom of the wick. Then, a canister similar in size to a standard rotating cylinder for normal revolvers is inserted into the side of the revolver, also similar to how one would reload a normal revolver. Then, when Ballad pulls the trigger of the revolver, an archaic hammer from within the revolver pops off the cap of the canister, letting loose a gust of air from the barrel as well as the wick within it, causing the wick to light on fire and serve as a flamethrower.

The canister has enough wind and wick to last for a total of six seconds before reloading, meaning each second must count. Thankfully, the flamethrower has several uses. The nature of the wick allows the flames to stick to surfaces, creating walls of fire that damage anyone who tries to pass them. These flames last around ten seconds unless something flammable is touched, in which case it would last around one minute. These flames are also capable of sticking to living beings like napalm, and provide damage overtime, though this only works if they are hit directly by the flames, and not from the walls of fire. The flames themselves are heavily damaging, though this is overcome by the short range of the flamethrower, with a maximum range being six feet, as well as low fuel that only lasts six seconds. The reloading time takes a total of two seconds to complement the short range and short usage, though he will be reloading a lot to make use of the flamethrower despite its damage and ability to stick to surfaces.

All bolded words are the ones being improved.

By adding this function you gotta pay 600 more OM. One for the wall coating and one for burning people with it like napalm. Edit: how long do they last on people