Move Approval V

[Reece]

I have a new RP Fodder Move I'd like approved:
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The Fires that Conjure Strange Devices; Communications of the Golden Conflagration! (0) (RP Fodder Move)
(Mobile Dataverse Device, Communicator)
A small, roughly cuboid, golden fire (which can’t deal damage but feels warm to anyone with DEF less than twice her ATK) appears somewhere within 3 metres of Ahana (and keeps its position in relation to her body if she moves), lasting half a second before winking out to reveal a small, plain tablet made of pure gold. None of its edges are sharp, but the bottom corners are more rounded than those on the front face. The object’s dimensions are 15cm x 7cm x 1cm. These are almost effortless to create and there is no limit to the maximum number she can have, though she can only summon up to two at a time. She has no method of un-summoning them, so will typically just throw one away when done using it. Using this in combat would be extraordinarily inefficient, though, as they would deal extremely low damage even compared to other Incidental Weapons.

The real purpose of these things is that they serve as Dataverse Devices for her. They are magical rather than technological in nature, but still function much like ordinary smartphones; with the front face being covered by an ‘illusion spell’ (i.e. a monitor) when in use (they’re also able to do other phone-like things such as produce sounds and take photos, despite having neither speakers nor cameras). They only work as Dataverse Devices when Ahana herself is touching them, though; in anyone else’s hands they are just small blocks of gold.

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In case it matters at all, the summoning process I used for these is the same (though worded a little more succinctly) as that used in this Move here:
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The Fires that Forge Endless Spines; Creations of the Golden Conflagration!
(Physical Strength, Ranged Proficiency, Ranged Materialise Proficiency)
Reference image for the javelins’ shape and approximate size in relation to her:
https://image.ibb.co/j1k1s7/Jav_Scale_Small.png
A thin, straight line of golden fire, 3 cm thick, shoots (at a speed of 22 m/s) from one point within 3 metres of Ahana to another point just a little over 2.2 metres away from the first. This fire cannot deal damage, though anyone with DEF less than twice her ATK will feel some warmth emanating from it. After an additional 0.4 seconds (i.e. it has half a second total summoning time), the fire vanishes, revealing a javelin made of pure gold. Creating one of these is almost effortless and requires some concentration, but not complete Focus, meaning she can still move about as normal (the fire follows her if she does, maintaining its position in relation to her body) and she can use Physical Strength defensively (e.g. to bat away a sword if someone tried to stab her). Alternatively, she can choose to summon two at once, in which case she can move at no faster than walking speed whilst summoning and cannot defend herself. It is entirely possible for her to wield one of these in each hand, if she wishes, or she can opt to use only one at a time.

The javelins are 220 cm long, 2.5 cm thick at their widest, and have sharp points on either end. Due to being made entirely of gold and being completely solid, they weigh far more than sporting javelins, which are hollow. As a result of this additional weight, they can only be thrown at about half the speed and a quarter as far as someone with her ATK would be able to throw a regular javelin, though this extra weight does also mean that they deal a fair bit more damage than normal ones. They can be used for either melee or ranged attacks, though due to being made from such a soft metal as gold, they can be dented, bent and broken much more easily than most weapons. Ahana has no limit to the number she can summon in total and no method of un-summoning them. This makes it entirely plausible for anyone nearby to get their hands on one of her javelins and use it as an Incidental Weapon.

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And I'd also like to update this Move now that I have Ranged Proficiency:
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Abyssal Screech
(Area Attack Proficiency, Physical Strength)
This Move can only be used when China's mouth is in its second form (see 'Resilient China Fangs'). China opens his mouth wide and lets loose a piercing shriek so loud and so high-pitched that it is actually capable of causing real harm to those hearing it from close by.

Abyssal Screech damages the eardrums of affected parties, so generally the only visible sign of any injuries caused will be blood running from the ears, at the most. The distance at which one can stand from China before being within range of having their eardrums ruptured depends on their DEF compared to his ATK. For each point that his ATK exceeds their DEF, add 1 foot of distance; so, for example, if his ATK was 10 and his opponent's DEF was 0, he could harm them from up to 10' away from his head. Note that whilst Ranged Proficiency is not required for this Move, China cannot harm anyone more than 12' away without it. Enemies outside the damage range may still feel some pain, but will not be harmed by it and will be assumed to be capable of ignoring it well enough to continue fighting unless the character's owner states otherwise. Characters whose DEF matches or exceeds China's ATK will not be harmed by this Move (unless their owner wishes them to be).

This Move can be maintained for a maximum of 20 seconds and in order to take enough damage to actually have their eardrums burst, an individual must remain close enough to China to be affected for at least 2 seconds. China himself will not be harmed by Abyssal Screech, but otherwise it will affect enemies and allies alike. China must remain stationary whilst using this Move and must Focus on it completely, so cannot use any other Moves or Powers at the same time. Also, this Move tires him significantly, has a 15 minute cooldown period, and prevents him from speaking at all for 5 minutes after each use.

Abyssal Screech can theoretically deal lethal damage, though in order for it to do so China would have to keep an opponent at very close proximity (1/2 of their affected range) for twice the standard effect duration (4 seconds). This will generally only be possible for lesser Secondaries or Primes too weakened to fight back (i.e. I could have him use it as a finisher move after having won a graded fight).

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The only changes I'm making are adding Ranged Proficiency to the requirements and removing the line "Note that whilst Ranged Proficiency is not required for this Move, China cannot harm anyone more than 12' away without it." from the description:
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Abyssal Screech (300)
(Area Attack Proficiency, Physical Strength, Ranged Proficiency)
This Move can only be used when China's mouth is in its second form (see 'Resilient China Fangs'). China opens his mouth wide and lets loose a piercing shriek so loud and so high-pitched that it is actually capable of causing real harm to those hearing it from close by.

Abyssal Screech damages the eardrums of affected parties, so generally the only visible sign of any injuries caused will be blood running from the ears, at the most. The distance at which one can stand from China before being within range of having their eardrums ruptured depends on their DEF compared to his ATK. For each point that his ATK exceeds their DEF, add 1 foot of distance; so, for example, if his ATK was 10 and his opponent's DEF was 0, he could harm them from up to 10' away from his head. Enemies outside the damage range may still feel some pain, but will not be harmed by it and will be assumed to be capable of ignoring it well enough to continue fighting unless the character's owner states otherwise. Characters whose DEF matches or exceeds China's ATK will not be harmed by this Move (unless their owner wishes them to be).

This Move can be maintained for a maximum of 20 seconds and in order to take enough damage to actually have their eardrums burst, an individual must remain close enough to China to be affected for at least 2 seconds. China himself will not be harmed by Abyssal Screech, but otherwise it will affect enemies and allies alike. China must remain stationary whilst using this Move and must Focus on it completely, so cannot use any other Moves or Powers at the same time. Also, this Move tires him significantly, has a 15 minute cooldown period, and prevents him from speaking at all for 5 minutes after each use.

Abyssal Screech can theoretically deal lethal damage, though in order for it to do so China would have to keep an opponent at very close proximity (1/2 of their affected range) for twice the standard effect duration (4 seconds). This will generally only be possible for lesser Secondaries or Primes too weakened to fight back (i.e. I could have him use it as a finisher move after having won a graded fight).

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I'm not totally sure where the line is regarding being able to attack people in melee range with a ranged move, but I don't think I should need to pay an extra 300 OM for this, since I've never seen anyone buying a gun Move being told that they can't shoot people less than 12' away unless they pay an extra 300 OM and buy Physical Strength.