Official Move Approval III

[Gamzee Makara]

The Lightning Spear is a strange projectile that Gamzee throws like a javelin. The spear itself is one meter long and appears as a solid spear of violet lightning. It erupts in a small shower of sparks upon contact with a foreign surface, excluding organic material(i.e. skin or fur) which it punctures as a regular spear would before also violently blowing up in another spark shower that doesn't extend beyond roughly 2/3 of a meter. The downside is of course that the AoE of the sparks is pretty small, and the sparks themselves don't actually do or hurt that much unless Gamzee can actually hit his target. Getting hit with the spear is similar to being pierced by a regular spear, except upon contact the projectile is white hot. It's plasma, after all. The sparks burn just as hot, but would do little more than singe a little skin off unless contact is made with an open wound. That shit will hurt. The whole experience is like beings stabbed with a fire poker that has been left in the fireplace for a way too long time. It's hotter than it should be. The sparks? Ever burn your hand with a sparkler? Those little fireworks things? Think about that but about 4 times as ouch. The spear is simply a thrown projectile and travels as such. How fast it is thrown is dependent on Gamzee's ATK. At current stat (ATK=4) I would say the spear thrown in a straight line trajectory would not be quite as fast as a fastball thrown by a major league pitcher, so let's say roughly 65 mph? And then if it were thrown in an arc it would be different of course. The spear is just like any regular object, and is affected by gravity omniphysics, so eventually it will stop moving/hit the ground due to gravity. Just like a regular spear. It will not lose its potency unless it comes into contact with a foreign surface, organic or otherwise.

As the electricity channels into his favorite weapons, the clubs become wrapped up lightning as if it were living barbed wire. The lightning dissipates on contact with any surface, so if he misses, then that's pretty much it for that club. If he manages to land a hit on his opponent with a club coiled with lightning, it is similar to being struck with an electric stun baton or taser. Coined as Stun Clubs, Gamzee can only charge his clubs once per fight, as continued use degrades the integrity and solidarity of his pins. Being struck with one of these charged weapons will cause the body to seize up and become immobilized. With a DEF higher than Gamzee's ATK, this effect can be lessened or even shrugged off. If the DEF matches my ATK, then the effect is noticeably lessened. Every point after that up to 2 points over my attack will weaken it further until it is ineffective.

The Overcharge is also rather contained, and is only about 5 meters in diameter, with Gamzee at the center. It is similar to an electrically caused combustion or explosion. It is...violent, to say the least. While fairly devastating to any close range opponents, it also happens to damage Gamzee. The explosion singes and burns his skin, but not enough to leave scars. It can be pretty exhausting and often after triggering the blast, the clown must take a moment to breathe and regain his senses.

(900 OM for three different purposes, requires Ranged Proficiency, Debuff Proficiency(For the Stun Clubs), and Area Attack Proficiency)

Lightning Aura -- At its base it looks good, but some things about each specific application. also, three seconds would be good in my eyes for the Lightning Spear and Stun Clubs portion, while the Overcharge I would probably go with four seconds, just to indicate the punch I assume it's supposed to pack.
Lightning Spear -- Once its thrown, how fast does it travel? And what is its range before it loses its punch?
Stun Clubs -- What actual effect does this confer? Assuming it's some sort of debilitating stun effect, based on the name and Debuff Proficiency, but gonna need an actual mechanic for how it works, along with how generally effective it is/what stats it relies on and generally how long it lasts.
The Overcharge -- Kind of a small radius for an explosion, but I don't see any issue with it.

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