Secondary Saga Reviews

[Gildarts]

Very interested in this. I ranged from taking the most injuries to zero depending on the phase, so I'd love to know what worked and what didn't. I don't really have a certain phase or post that I'd request a review of, if that's what we need, though. Just happy to get any feedback, big or little!

Well put. I'll keep it pretty simple, you did a nice job keeping the reader interested in your character/ and what he was going to do next. There were some times that the interaction between Abner and the group was less solid than other times, this wavering feeling, while attributed possibly to his unique position in the group, did occasionally count against you.

Another time, a bit more emphasis on maintaining your character as "round" could have been given, however this was more in the earlier stages, as looking back, I'd say he's changed a lot.

Even though you didn't get a complete score in round five, this was posted this under your scoresheet by yours truly "(I just wanted to note here, that I think Zack has done a wonderful job this entire saga, and that this phase has been no different. I was super impressed with the amount he has participated and the careful thought and consideration he has given to his character, the story, and everyone else’s character too. I also was lucky enough to get a chance to write with him, and I think he did a nice job doing justice to my character as well.)"

Pretty much, nice balanced character and impact. I think the intrigue is what really kept my attention the most, and prompted me to write that below. .... Also the following (which you got a perfect score) I wrote "Blown away!"


That's my review for you, I don't really have much else to say? If you have specific questions I'll answer them, but I think what 'didn't work' was mentioned above, and while there were probably a few other things I missed, I know some other characters that aren't judges found your character very intriguing as well, which doesn't impact the score, but I think that alone tells you that you did very well in staging, framing, pacing, and just setting the story up for Abner to thrive under the circumstances.