10-24-2015, 10:12 AM
Use this checklist. I'm going to bold everything that's relevant and hasn't been included.
• How powerful is it? Does it have a wide area of effect, or multiple projectiles? How big is the weapon? What size are the projectiles?
• *Is it instantaneous, or quick to use? Or is it slow? (Almost instantaneous? A moment? Several seconds? Longer? Be specific.)
• Once activated, how fast does it travel? (Fast as a thrown ball or slower? Arrow? Bullet?)
• Is it difficult to aim? Must it be aimed at all?
• Can the user move around or do other things while using the move, or must they be stationary?
• Does the user have to keep their focus on the move, or is it 'fire and forget'?
• Does it have effects that linger after the user is no longer performing the move? If so, how long do they last?
• What does it look like? How is it performed? How does it feel to get hit with it?
Use this as a basis:
Necrotic Touch (Requires physical, debuff proficiencies, 600 OM)
Okor's hands ooze a toxic slime, containing a particularly virulent strain of flesh-eating bacterium, which draws forth his various parasites with the promise of a meal. This ability takes two seconds of stationary concentration to activate, afterwards, Okor's hands become dangerous weapons. Contact with the substance seeping from his hands almost instantly causes deterioration. With only brief contact (such as a slap, or a punch), the area is irritated and sore. If Okor manages to maintain the contact for several seconds (such as by holding the enemy down), the skin begins to rot and soften. Should the unfortunate target be unable to free themselves from his grip for seven seconds, the damage becomes more severe, as a variety of infections and parasites begin to make their way to the foe, causing significant discomfort, and starting to worm their way into the foe's flesh. The foe's chances of escape are greatly increased if their ATK or DEF score is higher than Okor's. The parasites may be removed out of combat, with either the channeling of Omnillium, or skilled medical aid.
Note that Okor has to be in melee range and sustain contact for a good effect. At present, you seem to be able to rapid-fire attack with an instant cast spell that rots flesh (albeit in a small range). You also don't take into account the difference between your ATK/TEC and their DEF. Give a range (ie, it ranges from bruise-like abrasions and mild softening of the skin to major blisters/softening) to account for stat differences. Give it downsides.
• How powerful is it? Does it have a wide area of effect, or multiple projectiles? How big is the weapon? What size are the projectiles?
• *Is it instantaneous, or quick to use? Or is it slow? (Almost instantaneous? A moment? Several seconds? Longer? Be specific.)
• Once activated, how fast does it travel? (Fast as a thrown ball or slower? Arrow? Bullet?)
• Is it difficult to aim? Must it be aimed at all?
• Can the user move around or do other things while using the move, or must they be stationary?
• Does the user have to keep their focus on the move, or is it 'fire and forget'?
• Does it have effects that linger after the user is no longer performing the move? If so, how long do they last?
• What does it look like? How is it performed? How does it feel to get hit with it?
Use this as a basis:
Necrotic Touch (Requires physical, debuff proficiencies, 600 OM)
Okor's hands ooze a toxic slime, containing a particularly virulent strain of flesh-eating bacterium, which draws forth his various parasites with the promise of a meal. This ability takes two seconds of stationary concentration to activate, afterwards, Okor's hands become dangerous weapons. Contact with the substance seeping from his hands almost instantly causes deterioration. With only brief contact (such as a slap, or a punch), the area is irritated and sore. If Okor manages to maintain the contact for several seconds (such as by holding the enemy down), the skin begins to rot and soften. Should the unfortunate target be unable to free themselves from his grip for seven seconds, the damage becomes more severe, as a variety of infections and parasites begin to make their way to the foe, causing significant discomfort, and starting to worm their way into the foe's flesh. The foe's chances of escape are greatly increased if their ATK or DEF score is higher than Okor's. The parasites may be removed out of combat, with either the channeling of Omnillium, or skilled medical aid.
Note that Okor has to be in melee range and sustain contact for a good effect. At present, you seem to be able to rapid-fire attack with an instant cast spell that rots flesh (albeit in a small range). You also don't take into account the difference between your ATK/TEC and their DEF. Give a range (ie, it ranges from bruise-like abrasions and mild softening of the skin to major blisters/softening) to account for stat differences. Give it downsides.
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