10-19-2015, 10:11 PM
Horcrux Binding - You don't really need this, as this sort of thing is already detailed within the rules. See Writing as NPCs and characters other than your own for further details.
Non-Verbal - This is fine
Verbal Casting - What I meant to change in this spell was the one second charge up time for the move. It seems more powerful than a move that would usually have a charge time of one second. I would say three seconds is appropriate.
Charged Casting - I'm assuming the charge time for this is five seconds?
Augmentations - Is this effect exactly the same for each spell, it's just the appearance that changes based on Non-verbal, verbal and Charged casting? if so, you need to make that very clear (if I had to ask, then it wasn't clear enough).
I would also say causing flesh to rot and keeping wounds from closing are two separate effects. It's one thing to cause a wound, but another thing to keep a wound open and worsen it, this would definitely increase the OM price per spell.
I'm also going to say that Rapidly eating away at flesh is too strong for a basic effect such as this. It's too vague at what 'rapid' could be. It could eat away all the flesh on a person's arm (I know you don't mean this, but I have to be clear) in the few seconds, it could be slower than that, but still fast enough that if you hit someone with the spell a could of times it could eat through their torso/ limb. I would say that it eats away at their flesh slowly.
Also, rather than over a period of a few seconds, could you give a specific amount of time?
You also need a limit on the affliction. As in, if someone (a Prime) is already affected, then being hit in another area will simply not cause any more corruption until the current effect ends, rather than cause all areas that had been hit, to be eaten away at. Because as it stands now, just by hitting someone with all five projectiles, in five separate spots, from non verbal casting would cause five separate areas of the body to become 'infected'. That would be way too over powered.
you can remove this part. Just substitute it out for an area of effect for the flesh eating effect and the amount of time that it would last. You can have it so that the area only effects, for example, an area of one centimeter in diameter. But, over the course of the effect, it slowly spreads to an area of - say - three centimeters.
Horcrux Body - This seems fine on the most part. The only problem being in the age part of the move. Of course we won't charge you extra OM for slight age differences, but as it stands now. The body would be that of an 17 - 18 year old right? If you wanted to, say, have him create a child-like body, that would cost you extra OM as the differences between appearance are too great. The same stipulations would apply with a body that is noticeably older.
Non-Verbal - This is fine
Verbal Casting - What I meant to change in this spell was the one second charge up time for the move. It seems more powerful than a move that would usually have a charge time of one second. I would say three seconds is appropriate.
Charged Casting - I'm assuming the charge time for this is five seconds?
Augmentations - Is this effect exactly the same for each spell, it's just the appearance that changes based on Non-verbal, verbal and Charged casting? if so, you need to make that very clear (if I had to ask, then it wasn't clear enough).
I would also say causing flesh to rot and keeping wounds from closing are two separate effects. It's one thing to cause a wound, but another thing to keep a wound open and worsen it, this would definitely increase the OM price per spell.
I'm also going to say that Rapidly eating away at flesh is too strong for a basic effect such as this. It's too vague at what 'rapid' could be. It could eat away all the flesh on a person's arm (I know you don't mean this, but I have to be clear) in the few seconds, it could be slower than that, but still fast enough that if you hit someone with the spell a could of times it could eat through their torso/ limb. I would say that it eats away at their flesh slowly.
Also, rather than over a period of a few seconds, could you give a specific amount of time?
You also need a limit on the affliction. As in, if someone (a Prime) is already affected, then being hit in another area will simply not cause any more corruption until the current effect ends, rather than cause all areas that had been hit, to be eaten away at. Because as it stands now, just by hitting someone with all five projectiles, in five separate spots, from non verbal casting would cause five separate areas of the body to become 'infected'. That would be way too over powered.
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you can remove this part. Just substitute it out for an area of effect for the flesh eating effect and the amount of time that it would last. You can have it so that the area only effects, for example, an area of one centimeter in diameter. But, over the course of the effect, it slowly spreads to an area of - say - three centimeters.
Horcrux Body - This seems fine on the most part. The only problem being in the age part of the move. Of course we won't charge you extra OM for slight age differences, but as it stands now. The body would be that of an 17 - 18 year old right? If you wanted to, say, have him create a child-like body, that would cost you extra OM as the differences between appearance are too great. The same stipulations would apply with a body that is noticeably older.
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