Secondary Saga Reviews

[Gamzee Makara]

I would like both halves of phase five to be analyzed a little more in depth, particularly the first half. I struggled trying to come up with ways to make Richtofen's interactions believable. In the second half, I thought that the post was pretty strong but that maybe there was something I was missing.


....I am going to assume that my overall problem across the board for the entire saga was my Grammar. I would like tips on how to better myself in that field. If there are any other like, very noticeable problems, I would like them addressed as well. I'll take care of my own nitpicking, primarily to save you and any other reviewers grief xD

I also feel as though my cohesiveness with the group storywise was not what it could have been. While some of this was character choice, I still felt as though it was not completely what it could have/should have been. Advice on that matter would also be appreciated.

Aside from this, anything really is appreciated. I'm sure there are some things that you noticed that I didn't.