Fight Challenge: Dante vs. Zangetsu

[Deadpool]

Well, there we have it. It always tends to hit me when I see my work critiqued like this, but I appreciate that and your judging nonetheless, Sinestro.

I'll have up a following post in due time.

I would't take the scoring too much to heart. Especially in the "Voice" and Description/Clarity" departments; those kinda go hand and hand.

Giving your work a stronger "Voice" simply means giving it your own style. Maybe using unconventional means to describing something? (I often do this, using analogies in my posts to give it a certain vibe). You just have to play around with different styles and tone-setters, and find out which one works best for you.

"Description/Clarity" usually is dulled down if you use a bunch of unnecessary words. Just try to describe something as well as you can, but with as little words as possible. A lot of times you can replace an adverb or adjective with a better noun or verb (ex. instead of saying leisurely walked you can say sauntered). In the areas where you feel like your description is too light, you can always try to reread the paragraph out-loud, and see how it sounds. This usually helps me.





These suggestions go to both of you, by the way. By no means was Thaal's judging supposed to bring out insecurities in your skill. Simply to compare/contrast the competitors, and to highlight areas of strength of areas that need some refining.