Secondary Saga Hints

[Gildarts]

I'm kinda with Adam on this one. I feel like I'm not doing a bad job, but it's more of an issue of me doing just an okay job, and I'd like it to you know, be a GREAT JOB DAMN SON YOURE GOING PLACES YOURE A PRODIGY YOURE
Okay maybe not that much but you get the idea. Just basically some things I can work on. Plus, surrounded by so much talent, I sometimes feel intimidated and I'm just like gah what if I'm not up to par.
So basically, could I just get a tad bit of advice?

Coming rict up! *puns*

Like some of the ones before you, it can't hurt to proof read a bit because of your character's speech difference.

I think you are doing a pretty good job so far and I don't think it can hurt to do a little reflection now and again, especially this phase I would like to see some emphasis on how his history aligns with the current zombie outbreak. You've shown this subtly, don't be afraid to break from the norm a bit. As for anything else to say, details and how they impact your character are always good.

Keep up the good work, ^^