Secondary Saga Hints

[Gildarts]

No need to tell us how mediocre we are, we know already, we just have to try harder. Although any help would be appreciated.

I love IRIS's concept, but you aren't the only robot!

I plan on including some bases of competitiveness in klaud's review as well, (so stay tuned) but you have done a good job to keep iris as an interesting individual.

I would suggest: always proof read your posts! And don't be afraid to be direct initially, and then add some statistical reasoning into the character (similar to Jan's /jak's advice). Any audience wants to be intrigued almost on a personal level.

>flaunt everything that makes Iris unique

As advice to everyone, and not just Iris
I suggest you involve a crumb of your characters "motive for Omni" in every post.

it's not like I do it or anything

Happy writing you guys, I hope I offered you some helpful feedback. Bolds and separated hints are the ultimate hints