08-08-2015, 11:37 AM
Hi! Thanks for your interest in the Omniverse. In the interest of getting you joined up as soon as possible, I'm going to offer you some advice to fix your profile so that your character can be accepted.
I'll break it down by section to help keep things sorted.
1. Character History: This seems mostly okay, but it's talking about someone named Lalvo Le-gil and your character is named Ada Bluevale. Are they the same person, and if so, how did her name get changed? In addition, your history mentions her getting 'born from clay'. Does this mean she's an artificial life form or a golem, and is she already the goddess of life, or is she only 'in training', per se? Finally, your history needs to mention at what point Omni takes her into the Omniverse.
2. Stats: Ada's stats only add up to 8 points and you're given 10 to work with at the start, so you have 2 more to put a anywhere you want.
3. Starting Moves: I'm not sure if you're still working on this, but you need to describe what Ada's Kamehameha attack is capable of. I see that it's 600 OM, so is it a super move or does it have two functions?
Also, on a final note, paying attention to typos will go a long way. In addition, you don't need to put <br> tags in your post to create spaces between lines.
Hope that helps!
I'll break it down by section to help keep things sorted.
1. Character History: This seems mostly okay, but it's talking about someone named Lalvo Le-gil and your character is named Ada Bluevale. Are they the same person, and if so, how did her name get changed? In addition, your history mentions her getting 'born from clay'. Does this mean she's an artificial life form or a golem, and is she already the goddess of life, or is she only 'in training', per se? Finally, your history needs to mention at what point Omni takes her into the Omniverse.
2. Stats: Ada's stats only add up to 8 points and you're given 10 to work with at the start, so you have 2 more to put a anywhere you want.
3. Starting Moves: I'm not sure if you're still working on this, but you need to describe what Ada's Kamehameha attack is capable of. I see that it's 600 OM, so is it a super move or does it have two functions?
Also, on a final note, paying attention to typos will go a long way. In addition, you don't need to put <br> tags in your post to create spaces between lines.
Hope that helps!
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