08-06-2015, 09:51 PM
Thank you for notifying me of the update, G0DFLRE. That said, it would be preferable if you posted any answers or updates in this thread. That way, the rest of the staff can see it as well and post in my stead in case I end up being (for whatever reason) too preoccupied to handle it.
Is the Mini Chain Jaeger Sword a small or a large blade? You say that it's small, but then say that it is 6 ft. long and 2 ft. wide, which is anything but small. :? I understand that you mean that it's 'small' compared to a full-sized Jaeger's sword, but you need to make that more clear in the description. Also, you should remove the whole section about how it does more damage to flesh than metal and the whole 'it only does as much damage was whatever it cuts'; weapons in the Omniverse can't be inherently better against certain types of materials and that whole part only serves to confuse the reader. Just make it clear whether it is a weak or powerful weapon and give it an appropriate upside/downside to that.
When I said that the Single Shot mode can't be both incredibly powerful and incredibly fast, I didn't necessarily mean that you had to balance it out by making it slow as molasses (though, if you want to do it that way, that's fine). XD An alternative would be to give it a charge-up time, so that an observant opponent can notice it coming and try to evade it. But the part about it being a massive energy drain is fine.
I think the whole 'x times weaker/faster than Single Shot' thing you have in the Full Auto description only complicates matters. Rewrite it and just describe it as if it was its own move.
Also, you'll need to significantly reduce the ranges of both modes. Both of those have waaay too far of a reach. Just for comparison, most of the ranged moves that we've approved had ranges of less than a 1000 feet. The longest I've seen is 4000 yards and that was for a sniper rifle (and even then, the round got weaker the more it passed the 1000 yard mark). So think more along the lines of those kind of ranges.
Is the Mini Chain Jaeger Sword a small or a large blade? You say that it's small, but then say that it is 6 ft. long and 2 ft. wide, which is anything but small. :? I understand that you mean that it's 'small' compared to a full-sized Jaeger's sword, but you need to make that more clear in the description. Also, you should remove the whole section about how it does more damage to flesh than metal and the whole 'it only does as much damage was whatever it cuts'; weapons in the Omniverse can't be inherently better against certain types of materials and that whole part only serves to confuse the reader. Just make it clear whether it is a weak or powerful weapon and give it an appropriate upside/downside to that.
When I said that the Single Shot mode can't be both incredibly powerful and incredibly fast, I didn't necessarily mean that you had to balance it out by making it slow as molasses (though, if you want to do it that way, that's fine). XD An alternative would be to give it a charge-up time, so that an observant opponent can notice it coming and try to evade it. But the part about it being a massive energy drain is fine.
I think the whole 'x times weaker/faster than Single Shot' thing you have in the Full Auto description only complicates matters. Rewrite it and just describe it as if it was its own move.
Also, you'll need to significantly reduce the ranges of both modes. Both of those have waaay too far of a reach. Just for comparison, most of the ranged moves that we've approved had ranges of less than a 1000 feet. The longest I've seen is 4000 yards and that was for a sniper rifle (and even then, the round got weaker the more it passed the 1000 yard mark). So think more along the lines of those kind of ranges.
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