08-02-2015, 07:02 PM
Not bad for my first combat round on this site. 2nd highest score! Thanks for judging and the feedback! I will try as always to work on my writing, in particular to avoid the step-by-step thing you mentioned. I'll try to work on adding more details and descriptions as well, which currently seems to be my bane. Traditionally I have been very to the point with my writing, but perhaps I can work on that. I'll figure it out.
It's actually rare that someone takes the time to grade something like this. Most of my time that I've spent roleplaying, most don't have anything to say about my writing. I appreciate that you took the time to actually give some feedback so that I can identify where my strengths and weaknesses are. Thanks again!
On a different note, I guess that the changeling didn't manage to stop a bounty being placed, but maybe he bought them 30 seconds to run?
It's actually rare that someone takes the time to grade something like this. Most of my time that I've spent roleplaying, most don't have anything to say about my writing. I appreciate that you took the time to actually give some feedback so that I can identify where my strengths and weaknesses are. Thanks again!
On a different note, I guess that the changeling didn't manage to stop a bounty being placed, but maybe he bought them 30 seconds to run?