Need a buddy?

[Okor]

i need a buddy i want to fix my character if there is anything wrong and i want to get him and his moves approved so if anyone can help me with that it'd be great oh and being my friend would help too"

I can give you a bit of a hand here. For starters, you should list the cost of your moves, proficiencies, etc. For example, 300 OM for your chainsword, and 600 OM for your blaster. All in all, you've spent 4300 OM (Unless I missed something). I highly recommend you look over your joining app as well, as there are a few grammar and spelling errors (Personnell should be Personal, if I'm interpreting your meaning right). Also, I counted a grand total of no periods in your app, which is something you might want to endeavour to fix.