07-27-2015, 02:19 PM
Well let me start with saying : "THAT WAS AWESOME". As somewhat of a fan of the whole Jack sparrow character this story really captured the character perfectly. His little tells, his way of speaking, way of thinking. It was like watching another movie of him. Knowing a character this well before you start reading about him and two people portraying an iconic character like him this well is a form of art. With every sentence I read, I could actually see him perform his actions the sparrow style. This was just good writing, couldn't say it any other way.
Leviathan is a character you wouldn't normally find in a pirate setting and it would seem difficult portraying her into the world of piracy. Yet, it seemed to come natural. It didn't feel like a forced encounter and a forced team up. Leviathan is a strong character that doesn't mess around and she sticks with this attitude throughout the story which I was happily surprised by. Too many times have i read something where they change the character in order to fit into the story. I'm glad to see this wasn't one of those cases.
The setting was wonderfully written, the detailed words describing the surroundings and atmosphere made it really easy to read and get into the right state of mind ( even for a foreigner like me ). Because of this you get drawn into the setting instantly.
Both Jack and leviathan are completely different characters and creating a chemistry between those two isn't easy at all. But even this seemed natural. There was something between the two and the reader doesn't yet know what it is. Hopefully we find out as the story continues.
Then there was the pirate talk, seriously THAT pirate talk.
This classic Jack Sparrow quote is a perfect example of how this 'pirate talk' just livens up the thread. It also provides with plenty of humor which the story had plenty of. Not too much that it became annoying but just the right amount for it to be enjoyable.
The only downside to this is that it read so quickly. I've seriously read it all in one go without going 'let me go do something else for a bit'. So when I reached the end of the thread i was a bit disappointed that it was over already but I can always hope for more to come.
Even though I'm not a great reviewer I just wanted to point out the things I thought were amazing here. Both of you keep up the awesome writing !
Leviathan is a character you wouldn't normally find in a pirate setting and it would seem difficult portraying her into the world of piracy. Yet, it seemed to come natural. It didn't feel like a forced encounter and a forced team up. Leviathan is a strong character that doesn't mess around and she sticks with this attitude throughout the story which I was happily surprised by. Too many times have i read something where they change the character in order to fit into the story. I'm glad to see this wasn't one of those cases.
The setting was wonderfully written, the detailed words describing the surroundings and atmosphere made it really easy to read and get into the right state of mind ( even for a foreigner like me ). Because of this you get drawn into the setting instantly.
Both Jack and leviathan are completely different characters and creating a chemistry between those two isn't easy at all. But even this seemed natural. There was something between the two and the reader doesn't yet know what it is. Hopefully we find out as the story continues.
Then there was the pirate talk, seriously THAT pirate talk.
Quote:“Right in me heart, that one,” he pouted, putting on a pitiful expression and laying a hand on his heart. “Well, if you’re so high and mighty, perhaps you wouldn’t enjoy a trip on my ship. I certainly don’t think I’d enjoy you, savvy?”
This classic Jack Sparrow quote is a perfect example of how this 'pirate talk' just livens up the thread. It also provides with plenty of humor which the story had plenty of. Not too much that it became annoying but just the right amount for it to be enjoyable.
The only downside to this is that it read so quickly. I've seriously read it all in one go without going 'let me go do something else for a bit'. So when I reached the end of the thread i was a bit disappointed that it was over already but I can always hope for more to come.
Even though I'm not a great reviewer I just wanted to point out the things I thought were amazing here. Both of you keep up the awesome writing !
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You're naive. We're destroyers, not saviors. - Yu Kanda