A Light in the Darkness Turn-IN

[Dark Link]

Thank you, DL. And no, it was obviously not a self-contained story, so I apologize if that took something from your experience reading it.

(and for the record, I made it a common trope throughout Proto Man's tenure in the Pale Moors that he is, in fact, a 'white' person in a sea of people who are either morally gray or outright 'black').

You're welcome. And like I said, the fact that it wasn't a self-contained story wasn't in itself a flaw. It's just that it didn't really feel that important to the overall storyline either, so it was almost like we were just there to kill time.

Also, I had absolutely no qualms about Proto essentially being a 'shining beacon of hope' within the Pale Moors; I mean that's what he does, after all. In fact, the good guys being great wasn't really what bothered me (though I found Mireya to be a bit too self-righteous at times). I just think the grey/"black" characters could have used a bit more fleshing out beyond "they're massive jerks". I just don't think that people who were just that would have such grim resolve to preserve the last spark of humanity within the Moors.