06-13-2015, 02:57 AM
I read this post quite a few times before finally figuring out what I wanted to touch on. I'll also try to construct around what Mickey said above.
Character interaction: You captured this very well as a writer, Warpool Valenchia is a larger alliance and it is difficult to get everyone's voice heard under the limits of the competition (such as time and length). However everyone has their role. I felt Sasuke narrated with good observation as well as made some good remarks that held the group together like glue. Wartortle and DP got along, in a clash that two powerful characters would be prone to.
Alpha male display of dominance with both their outgoing personalities also brought attention to those in the shadows like Vincent and Sasuke who seem more logic oriented than willing to brawl with their own teammates.
There were definitely parts where I felt "macho-guy talk" would be an understatement, but it is a manly and dominating team, with a rebellious Pokemon and a 4th-wall-crashin' DEADPOOL, I actually felt like the dialogue was well placed and with the blame and banter that rebounded off of others, the group bonded more and united under a same goal.
DP lightened the mood of the group and subtly showed his leadership skills in assisting others (who knew he was a team player?) and at the end the serious mood returned with new morale.
With a group, it can be hard to display other characters without putting your own in a less "showcase" oriented perspective. Mickey touched on this above, but I wanted to put it into my own words. We may not get a lot of screen time in DA (who knows when death will come) and no one else will portray Sasuke the way you will, so don't hold back showing his character a little more (champ!) and how it effected him. Though in your later posts, let it be known I thought you brought out Sasuke really well, and group moments like this make memories for a lifetime both in an out of character.
The dialogue is my favorite part of this post, because everyone has something to say and there isn't a reason for them to hold back saying it. A fun post and undoubtedly some of Warpool Valenchia's best.
Character interaction: You captured this very well as a writer, Warpool Valenchia is a larger alliance and it is difficult to get everyone's voice heard under the limits of the competition (such as time and length). However everyone has their role. I felt Sasuke narrated with good observation as well as made some good remarks that held the group together like glue. Wartortle and DP got along, in a clash that two powerful characters would be prone to.
Alpha male display of dominance with both their outgoing personalities also brought attention to those in the shadows like Vincent and Sasuke who seem more logic oriented than willing to brawl with their own teammates.
There were definitely parts where I felt "macho-guy talk" would be an understatement, but it is a manly and dominating team, with a rebellious Pokemon and a 4th-wall-crashin' DEADPOOL, I actually felt like the dialogue was well placed and with the blame and banter that rebounded off of others, the group bonded more and united under a same goal.
DP lightened the mood of the group and subtly showed his leadership skills in assisting others (who knew he was a team player?) and at the end the serious mood returned with new morale.
With a group, it can be hard to display other characters without putting your own in a less "showcase" oriented perspective. Mickey touched on this above, but I wanted to put it into my own words. We may not get a lot of screen time in DA (who knows when death will come) and no one else will portray Sasuke the way you will, so don't hold back showing his character a little more (champ!) and how it effected him. Though in your later posts, let it be known I thought you brought out Sasuke really well, and group moments like this make memories for a lifetime both in an out of character.
The dialogue is my favorite part of this post, because everyone has something to say and there isn't a reason for them to hold back saying it. A fun post and undoubtedly some of Warpool Valenchia's best.
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