Let's Read: Book Club #15

[Guu]

Oh god, sorry this is so late x.x I’m usually bad with this on a normal week, but DA has been a complete distraction. I’ll have to do the shortest one so I could get something in on time… sorry… x.x;;;

Enemies Without, Enemies Within

Whirda! Time to read something from a famous role player! At least I assume you’re famous considering how people talk about you in the chat.

”Tears like fat beetles crawled down his cheeks.”

…and now I know where you reputation comes from. Bravo. *Applause*

Already in the first post you have sucked me in with amazing prose work. I’m already intrigued, I can tell you’re quite masterful in writing an incredible hook.

Seriously, still floored by how that was. In two short paragraphs, you’ve established the focus character perfectly. I liked when he had to check and make sure no one saw him cry.

Ooh, and ticking clock element with the storm coming too. My god, I’m going to be gushing through this entire thing aren’t I?

I like the hint that Dobson had to cover up the murder a bit, or at least hide the details from the general public.

Oh god, and the description of the head staring accusingly at Dobson… wow x.x You have so much creativity, I’m so incredibly envious!

Well, I feel bad for Dobson now. I hope he catches the killer! On to the next post!


Great reference to Dante’s Abyss towards the beginning there. Dobson has a really good justification to hate Karl and the games.

That kid is going to have a hard time sleeping tonight…

Oh god, that dilemma he had towards the end between his role as a leader and as a role as a friend…


My final thoughts, you are a fantastic writer, these two post blew me away. I’m glad to see why people mention you as a really great writer and to see that your reputation was quite well deserved! I’m glad I read this, even if it was for the wrong reasons (lateness.) Anyways, great job!