[C&C] Doomguy General Discussion

[Deadpool]

I've just recently started to read your work. From what I've read so far, I really like.

I think you're one of the better 1st person writers here. The way you write 1st person sets a certain tone, and I feel like I hear 'Doom's voice as I read.

You don't overdue things with too many details. From what I see, you're not enamored with passive verbs and adverbs either, which is a good thing.

Granted, I've only read your most recent thread, but it's a good read.


One thing that I've seen so far is that sometimes you shift between tenses (past, present, future). When you do that you gotta try n make sure all the words around it are in the proper tenses as well, to match.

If I see anything else that blips my radar, I'll let ya know.


Other than that, I'm not seeing anything major. There are obvious grammar errors and things like that, but it isn't an eyesore, and I'm not much of a Grammar Dick anyway.



EDIT: Sorry I can't give a more detailed c&c, by the way. I'm currently using Starbucks wifi, and I'm packing up to leave now.