Let's Read: Book Club #13

[Deadpool]

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I must say, I enjoyed this thread more than I thought I was going to.

I really enjoyed how you well you were able to progress your story. There was a little backstory, a little build-up, and even a couple fights. Sometimes its difficult to make a quest/saga also flow with your own story, but you were able to do that quite effortlessly.

I liked how you dived into the character of some of the npc/secondaries you included in your posts. I came away feeling like a had a good sense of what type of people they were. People like Rumford. Also, I felt sad when when Cork died.

I liked how you integrated dialogue into your fights without it disrupting the flow too much as well. Sometimes that can be hard to do, especially since fights are supposedly fast paced.


You had some sweet opportunities to lay down some detail where you put things like:

Several hours and one boring trip later.

You could have made that entire a nice descriptive paragraph to lay foundation. Maybe an overview of how the trip went? idk, but I just felt a I ripped of an opportunity for a nice little layout there.



I'ma definitely try to keep myself updated on your character and his journeys. I look forward to seeing how his whole backstory n all play out.