04-20-2015, 02:01 PM
I'd like to nominate my own thread, Where caged Wolves lie for the next set of readings.
Snatched from Marvel
I had a LOT of fun reading this one, and since Deadpool is among my favourite comic book heroes (or anti-heroes, I guess in this case) it felt too much of an injustice to leave this out of my reading list.
I thought the inclusion of a prologue sequence was really good and fresh - I don't believe I've read any other pieces in the Nexus like this, in that regard. Some might have a few lines of prologue text before their characters are pulled into the Omniverse, sure, but you've a much more captivating read by taking a few posts to really set the scene and build the story up, as well as give the reader a first glance into the pure madness and insanity of Deadpool, for those who are unfamiliar with the character. Though the portrayal of Sabertooth was a bit incorrect and uncanon in some senses, you managed to break this up and make this more forgivable by shattering the 4th wall and outright stating this fact.
Speaking of your 4th wall breaking, might I just take a moment to pause and commend the style you do it in and your choice of character in general. I like how you use your writing persona as the guy who essentially "puppets" Deadpool along and progresses the story forward, which the character himself is completely aware of. Maybe I'm just fanboying a bit here, but Deadpool just generally is the perfect character fit for a setting like the Omniverse. His personality and craziness molds in so well with the chaos and hysteria of the world brilliantly, and I just love it.
I think you did his reaction to being pulled into the Omniverse pretty well. He was both wondering what the fuck just happened and casually breaking the 4th wall at the same time. Tells you he's seen some pretty crazy shit already.
That one line on it's own got me.
I don't have much else to say for the next few posts. They were nice, though I do agree somewhat with Vergil that more could have been included or written. Still, it takes someone with a certain skill and mindset to write a successful Deadpool, and you've definantely got the right kind of mind for him. It was a nice read overall, a story that had me interested and intrigued yet laughing at the same time. Deadpool's certainly a character I'll be following from now on.
The Last Avenger and The World of Omni: Raincheck
I've been meaning to read this one for a long while now, since my own storyline and this one are planned to crash together at some point in the near future. I'm glad this one was nominated up, since it gave me even more incentive to get reading!
I think every character in this thread did a brilliant job. There's a lot of new primes there who get their time to shine, and older primes such as Mami are inevitably dragged down into the fray as the story continues. There's quite a few of you, so I think I'll try and give you all separate feedback on what I think of your writing.
Sasuke, I think you did an excellent job of carrying the thread through, and still are now. From our discussions over Skype, I can really tell this is a story arc you've taken a lot of care to weave and craft. In terms of how you did in this thread, though, I'm really impressed with how well you caught and captured the character of Sasuke. The tragic hero who doesn't give two shits about anyone else and is so intent on seeing his own goals meet an end. I also enjoyed greatly how you switched perspectives from Sasuke to your NPC, Arnold. You really allowed to reader to delve deep into this mans thoughts and conscious, and that's a good thing, since it gives an NPC character rather than making him a blank filler or plot device. It's something I really admire about the style you write in, since it gives characters much more flavour and taste and allows us as the readers to take a step back and see things from a different perspective than we have so far.
I felt Mami's presence here gave the plot something of a comedic relief. Her cheery and always optimistic attitude contrasted nicely to the more solemn and brooding personalities of characters such as Sasuke and Obito. I feel as though all the characters did nicely here, and were totally what made this thread so enjoyable and fun.
For those of you who are headed to Corucsant with Sasuke - I'm eagerly excited to begin writing with you all
Search for Power
I'll get on this one a little later, got some stuff on right now.
Snatched from Marvel
I had a LOT of fun reading this one, and since Deadpool is among my favourite comic book heroes (or anti-heroes, I guess in this case) it felt too much of an injustice to leave this out of my reading list.
I thought the inclusion of a prologue sequence was really good and fresh - I don't believe I've read any other pieces in the Nexus like this, in that regard. Some might have a few lines of prologue text before their characters are pulled into the Omniverse, sure, but you've a much more captivating read by taking a few posts to really set the scene and build the story up, as well as give the reader a first glance into the pure madness and insanity of Deadpool, for those who are unfamiliar with the character. Though the portrayal of Sabertooth was a bit incorrect and uncanon in some senses, you managed to break this up and make this more forgivable by shattering the 4th wall and outright stating this fact.
Speaking of your 4th wall breaking, might I just take a moment to pause and commend the style you do it in and your choice of character in general. I like how you use your writing persona as the guy who essentially "puppets" Deadpool along and progresses the story forward, which the character himself is completely aware of. Maybe I'm just fanboying a bit here, but Deadpool just generally is the perfect character fit for a setting like the Omniverse. His personality and craziness molds in so well with the chaos and hysteria of the world brilliantly, and I just love it.
I think you did his reaction to being pulled into the Omniverse pretty well. He was both wondering what the fuck just happened and casually breaking the 4th wall at the same time. Tells you he's seen some pretty crazy shit already.
Quote:I don’t fear anything, except for a fishy vajay-jay.
That one line on it's own got me.
I don't have much else to say for the next few posts. They were nice, though I do agree somewhat with Vergil that more could have been included or written. Still, it takes someone with a certain skill and mindset to write a successful Deadpool, and you've definantely got the right kind of mind for him. It was a nice read overall, a story that had me interested and intrigued yet laughing at the same time. Deadpool's certainly a character I'll be following from now on.
The Last Avenger and The World of Omni: Raincheck
I've been meaning to read this one for a long while now, since my own storyline and this one are planned to crash together at some point in the near future. I'm glad this one was nominated up, since it gave me even more incentive to get reading!
I think every character in this thread did a brilliant job. There's a lot of new primes there who get their time to shine, and older primes such as Mami are inevitably dragged down into the fray as the story continues. There's quite a few of you, so I think I'll try and give you all separate feedback on what I think of your writing.
Sasuke, I think you did an excellent job of carrying the thread through, and still are now. From our discussions over Skype, I can really tell this is a story arc you've taken a lot of care to weave and craft. In terms of how you did in this thread, though, I'm really impressed with how well you caught and captured the character of Sasuke. The tragic hero who doesn't give two shits about anyone else and is so intent on seeing his own goals meet an end. I also enjoyed greatly how you switched perspectives from Sasuke to your NPC, Arnold. You really allowed to reader to delve deep into this mans thoughts and conscious, and that's a good thing, since it gives an NPC character rather than making him a blank filler or plot device. It's something I really admire about the style you write in, since it gives characters much more flavour and taste and allows us as the readers to take a step back and see things from a different perspective than we have so far.
I felt Mami's presence here gave the plot something of a comedic relief. Her cheery and always optimistic attitude contrasted nicely to the more solemn and brooding personalities of characters such as Sasuke and Obito. I feel as though all the characters did nicely here, and were totally what made this thread so enjoyable and fun.
For those of you who are headed to Corucsant with Sasuke - I'm eagerly excited to begin writing with you all
Search for Power
I'll get on this one a little later, got some stuff on right now.
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