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[Yukki Kazuto]

So, this is the first of ever heard of Masculine and Feminine rhymes. After reading up on them, I found them very interesting to read about and point out. Even though it's pretty much the entire point, it's still a weird feeling to be told "Your poem makes me mentally flinch" XD As to your comment about dropping a specific line, I will take it into consideration, even though I couldn't really find an example of Succubi hiding in any kind of folk lore. But hey, maybe I just suck at research into mythical creatures...