Olabisi Jana (the actual one)(I finished it I think)

[Gilgamesh]

Hi there!

First thing's first you need to write specifically when your character is taken to the Omniverse

I would suggest rereading <!-- l --><a class="postlink-local" href="http://omniverse-rpg.com/moves.php#Moves">moves.php#Moves</a><!-- l --> but here are some comments about your moves.

Moves need to be more specific, For example, you can't say you can bend elements but instead you can say something around the lines of a fireball or throwing a chunk of rock for a move. It has to be specific, for a good representative of what your looking for you may check out Avatar Aang's roster-----> <!-- l --><a class="postlink-local" href="http://omniverse-rpg.com/viewtopic.php?f=30&t=1709">viewtopic.php?f=30&t=1709</a><!-- l -->

For your second move, I'm kind of confused about what it does? Does it tickle the person? Also tell us how long does it take to charge and you'll need homing proficiency for this one.