Let's Read: Book Club #10, 11

[Sasuke Uchiha]

Guu’d Vs Evil:

I was extremely happy to see this thread in the book club as I was reading this up to date for the most part and for good reason; this fight is a first of its kind. Never before had a fight taken place that originated from the Dataverse! If you didn’t catch the TMZ style drama that takes place here I suggest you read it as it starts the whole thing off.

Now let me just say that originally, when I first seen this fight taking place, I felt it odd that Glilgamesh would get all worked up over a child’s trolling on the internet, however, as you can see through the writing, that’s just Gilgamesh’s character; he’s entitled and no one is safe from his wraith!
So, in the opening we have Guu foreshadowing her upcoming transformation which is nice. I hate when things seem to just appear out of nowhere like it wasn't planned, so, kudos there.

He turned to the wooden post that was right next to the portal to the dunes and bent down to inspect it closer.

Blah blah verse <----
Whocaresverse----->
Tangled Green ---->

Ah yes! That was the one he was looking for.

If you aren't reading Gilgamesh, you should be. He is quickly becoming one of my favorite characters as he is always good for a chuckle to lighten the tone.

Gligamesh finds Guu relatively easily, but that was to expected; her twitter exposed which zone she was in and Omni’s only so big, so, the two primes trash talking on the interwebs would be the talk of the verse.

I love that he was carrying around for a minute before he noticed Guu. Also loved the weather line, ice breaker Guu. xD

Gilgamesh making her entertain him to mock her is a prime example of his entitled character. Good stuff.

The imagery of Gil peering over to see what Guu was up to only to get 'willy wopped' by Guu was done nicely. I also like the rubber, bubble gum, and shuffle style dodging you did.

“No one makes me bleed my own blood” xD

Gil’s taking some heavy fire and throwing a hissy fit about it =P

The cliché “where’d she go” worked nicely with your scythe move. *Thumbs up*

OH SNAP… Chains of Babylon cliff hanger! =O

Guu, you’re writing is great, although, sometimes it’s hard on my eyes. For example:

The chains bound Guu’s arms, she felt their grip tightening against her flesh, wincing in pain a bit as they dragged against her skin. Gilgamesh held the blades inches away from her neck. She could almost feel the tips poking through, but that was just a frog in her throat. Gil sported an evil grin towards his helpless captor.
“Now, let’s take care of that weapon of your’s.” He said, following with a chuckle.
He moved one of the blades and hovered it over her right arm, the exact place where he saw the gun come out. But just as he reeled back his sword, Guu retracted her arms and legs, thinning them until the chains couldn’t hold them anymore. She pulled them into the main part of her body until she was a ball, then she sloshed her weight around until she slipped out the chains that were holding her chest.
She plopped onto the ground where her body quickly regained its shape. She could feel him raising his sword to swipe down at her. Thinking quick, she popped over her arm and aimed her gun up at him, but her weapon happened to be in the path of the sword’s swing. It cut deep into the weapon, slicing through the barrels, into part of the mechanism itself, cutting a little bit into her arm in the process. The blade dissipated into gold dust while still embedded in the gun.

This is really just nit picking as there nothing much else to say, but it’s just a little easier on the eyes broken up with spaces like this:

The chains bound Guu’s arms, she felt their grip tightening against her flesh, wincing in pain a bit as they dragged against her skin. Gilgamesh held the blades inches away from her neck. She could almost feel the tips poking through, but that was just a frog in her throat. Gil sported an evil grin towards his helpless captor.

“Now, let’s take care of that weapon of your’s.” He said, following with a chuckle.
He moved one of the blades and hovered it over her right arm, the exact place where he saw the gun come out. But just as he reeled back his sword, Guu retracted her arms and legs, thinning them until the chains couldn’t hold them anymore. She pulled them into the main part of her body until she was a ball, then she sloshed her weight around until she slipped out the chains that were holding her chest.

She plopped onto the ground where her body quickly regained its shape. She could feel him raising his sword to swipe down at her. Thinking quick, she popped over her arm and aimed her gun up at him, but her weapon happened to be in the path of the sword’s swing. It cut deep into the weapon, slicing through the barrels, into part of the mechanism itself, cutting a little bit into her arm in the process. The blade dissipated into gold dust while still embedded in the gun.

Also, I would have liked to have seen you struggle with the chains just a little more, seems like you overcame them just a little too easily. However, the way you describe Gil taunting you to come out is right out of a serial killer movie, well done! ^_^

OH SNAP. Transformation! Who’s hunting whom?! Lol

Guu felt herself blushing. She wasn’t sure if it was because of the half naked man in front of her or if she actually found him attractive. She honestly didn’t want to know the answer to that for fear of her psyche.

Cute ^_^

Gilgamesh actually was thinking if he could possibly lose….Of course not! He was Gilgamesh after all, The King of Heroes

Gilgamesh sighed as he charged towards his opponent, every muscle and limb in his body screaming to stop.

I don’t think sighing is the reaction you were going for here, but I may be wrong. Pointing it out regardless. ^_^

Yea, F*ck you and the horse you rode in on. Here’s a hundo, now scat. xD

Ha… That’s what you get slow poke. *Woot for speedy players* =P

--And so it ends as it had begun, with the dataverse. Very good read guys. I give it an 8 out of 10 at least!