11-13-2017, 02:09 PM
(This post was last modified: 11-13-2017, 02:10 PM by Ebonywood Hellscythe.)
@Ryo:
Blade Fury
>This might seem obvious, but you should give a rough size (e.g. just tight enough for his sword to reach them), and clarify the circle is around his opponent(s).
>How long does this last? How long can he keep moving and attacking in a circle like this?
>What if your opponent also has super speed, or is able to move as fast or faster than you? Wouldn't that make it impossible for this to work? You might want to make a comment that the move could end early if that happens, or that he moves faster that usual to prevent this from happening.
>I don't think you need area attack (as Blink suggested), since each attack is individual - unless you want to target an area in general. If you can miss and your attack still damages someone, you'd need it. Or if you were hitting with a 3ft diameter explosion (or larger). Etc. But running around and making individual attacks across a large area wouldn't require it.
>By "balance", what do you mean? Just generally out of breath and tired? Can he not use other moves during this time? Can he only move at half speed? Is his aim off, or can he not make attacks at all? For 20 seconds, I'd expect the drawback to generally be lighter, so just say something clarifying his speed is halved and his attacks are less accurate. Since regaining balance to me makes me think of him standing still for a while trying to stay upright - which is probably not what you meant.
>Since super speed usually only works for going in a straight line, I think this should leave him tired afterward, especially since you said the momentum puts a strain on his body.
>Suggestion: Unless you have other plans for one, this would make a good supermove, given how it plays out.
Blade Fury
Quote:Ryu starts this move by drawing his sword and holding it pointed down towards the ground>This is a nitpick you don't need to include this kind of stuff. Since like, what if his sword was already drawn? This is personal preference, but I find it better to start with where the move actually begins, maybe adding a little bit of fluff before it. Maybe say, "Ryu often starts this..." instead.
Quote:He starts moving his feet at an accelerated pace in a tight circle
>This might seem obvious, but you should give a rough size (e.g. just tight enough for his sword to reach them), and clarify the circle is around his opponent(s).
>How long does this last? How long can he keep moving and attacking in a circle like this?
>What if your opponent also has super speed, or is able to move as fast or faster than you? Wouldn't that make it impossible for this to work? You might want to make a comment that the move could end early if that happens, or that he moves faster that usual to prevent this from happening.
>I don't think you need area attack (as Blink suggested), since each attack is individual - unless you want to target an area in general. If you can miss and your attack still damages someone, you'd need it. Or if you were hitting with a 3ft diameter explosion (or larger). Etc. But running around and making individual attacks across a large area wouldn't require it.
>By "balance", what do you mean? Just generally out of breath and tired? Can he not use other moves during this time? Can he only move at half speed? Is his aim off, or can he not make attacks at all? For 20 seconds, I'd expect the drawback to generally be lighter, so just say something clarifying his speed is halved and his attacks are less accurate. Since regaining balance to me makes me think of him standing still for a while trying to stay upright - which is probably not what you meant.
>Since super speed usually only works for going in a straight line, I think this should leave him tired afterward, especially since you said the momentum puts a strain on his body.
>Suggestion: Unless you have other plans for one, this would make a good supermove, given how it plays out.