Score Cards

[Karl Jak]

Fight A Taloc/Makoto vs Ash/Jak

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Ash -- Already shared this sentiment with you but for posterity sake: "the transition from 'food fight with angry words' to 'i'mma fucking impale you with a chainsword and spray your blood everywhere, bukake-style' was amusing on various levels".  Solid work.  Not quite sure where that opening memory bit slides in, but if I have time, I'll fish back and see if I can figure it out.
Jak -- Solid use of the alter ego.  Glad you went with the other one, but now I'm left to wonder what you'll do in the next round?
Taloc -- I'd consider sticking to one tense, because by the end of your second post, I couldn't tell if the shifting was deliberate or otherwise.  Other than that, I enjoyed the look at a more unstable Taloc.
Makoto -- If it's any consolation, your second post had me going back into your history.
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