Score Cards

[Karl Jak]

Fight #7 - Jibril/Harley Quinn vs Cerise/Gildarts

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Fight #7 Jibril/Harley Quinn vs Cerise/Gildarts

Jibril
Clarity/Description – 2 / 2
Voice – 2 / 3
Characterization – 2 / 2.5
Story – 2 / 2
Technical – 2 / 2
Overall Average = 2.15
Notes -> Solid job for coming into this with a relatively fresh character and something I think is normally outside the scope of what you normally write. I think you started “getting the swing of it” by your second post, and I’m curious to see how your next fight goes.

Harley Quinn
Clarity/Description – 3 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization – 3.5 / 3
Story – 3 / 3
Technical – 3 / 3
Overall Average = 3.05
Notes -> It usually takes something special to get me to enjoy a first-person narrative. We’ve had plenty in the Omniverse, and the only one who really got my engines revving was Doomguy (Strazio toyed with 1st person a lot and was effective too). That said, Harley was likely my favorite part about the fight, and I think your narrative had to do a lot with that. You also get the award for ‘Roster I enjoy the most to look at.’

Cerise
Clarity/Description – 2 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization – 3 / 3
Story – 2 / 3.5
Technical – 3 / 3
Overall Average = 2.85
Notes -> I’m pretty sure that both Cerise and Jibril aren’t intended to be one-off characters. As NPCs, it’s expected that there’ll be some hiccups, because your often just relying on the hand you’re dealt in order to create compelling and engaging fights. I think you won the battle for NPC supremacy, but I think there’s likely more you can get out of the ‘snek’ lady.

Gildarts
Clarity/Description – 3 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization – 2 / 2
Story – 2 / 2
Technical – 3 / 3
Overall Average = 2.6
Notes -> Still sound writing. Still well-crafted posts. Gildarts is still a solid bro. Still feels like you’re warming up and/or shaking off rust though.[/spoiler]