Score Cards

[Karl Jak]

Fight #1 Taloc/Makoto vs Kerrigan/Bandit

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Fight #1 Taloc/Makoto vs Kerrigan/Bandit

Taloc
Clarity/Description – 3 / 2
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  2 / 3
Story – 2 / 3
Technical – 2 / 2
Overall Average = 2.5
Notes -> I’m so used to only seeing present tense when it’s people who are otherwise writing in past tense and being unable to get a handle on their tenses.  The fact that you, for the most part, use it as it is supposed to be used is remarkable, especially since you maintained third person.

Makoto
Clarity/Description – 2 / 2
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  3 / 3
Story – 2 / 3
Technical – 2 / 3
Overall Average = 2.6
Notes -> Been a while since DA16.  I think you went inactive in that one, or at least, you were pretty quiet.  Solid character, but he wound up being overshadowed by other egos.

Kerrigan
Clarity/Description – 3 / 4
Voice – 2 / 4
Characterization –  3 / 4
Story – 3 / 4
Technical – 2 / 4
Overall Average = 3.3
Notes -> I was reminded today that all you jagoffs who attacked Darkshire should have got bounties, but since most of you may get KO’d at some point, I’ll refrain from giving out spare OM to these –monsters.  Anyway, this was some great stuff.  Your second post was one of the best posts in this round, and I really got a kick out of the grindhouse-style gore of your first post.

Bandit
Clarity/Description – 3 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  3 / 3
Story – 3 / 3
Technical – 3 / 3
Overall Average = 3
Notes -> ‘Above average’ essentially sums up your job here.  Bandit has a certain aura around her that makes her a fun character, and you accentuate that well when you write her. In a few ways, I might prefer her to Sinestro, since we have a glut of vainglorious pseudo-villains in the Omniverse.  In what was a genuine surprise for me, though, Bandit got 100% ‘upstaged’ (for lack of a better word) by the psychopath with the army of bug monsters.
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