Score Cards

[Karl Jak]

Fight #9 - Whirda/Yuuka vs Ok Dongja/Marisa

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Whirda
Clarity/Description – 3 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  3 / 3
Story – 2 / 3
Technical – 3.5 / 4
Notes – Yu Kanda told me I have no business giving you feedback to make you better, and he’s a special snowflake who donated.

Yuuka
Clarity/Description – 2 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  2 / 3
Story – 2 / 2
Technical – 3 / 3
Notes – By the second post, I was feeling really invested in your character.  I’m curious to see more as they move on in the tournament.

Ok Dongja
Clarity/Description – 3 / 3
Voice – 3 / 3
Characterization –  3 / 3
Story – 2 / 2
Technical –  3 / 3
Notes – Man, if I didn’t know any better, I’d assume you’re not the same guy who writes the Vision.  The differences in styles are remarkable.

Marisa
Clarity/Description – 2 / 2
Voice – 2 / 2
Characterization –  2 / 2
Story – 2 / 2
Technical – 1 / 2
Notes – Your first post had some pretty clear-cut editing misses/gaffes, and I can go over those with you in more detail if you’d like.  I do want to say that, in the event that you feel some disappointment, you should go back and re-read your stuff as Chara from two years back.  It’s night-and-day how much better you’ve become.  Once you get some more practice editing and proofing, you’ll be on the cusp of taking that next step.
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