06-12-2018, 03:50 PM
(This post was last modified: 06-12-2018, 05:23 PM by The Vision.)
(06-02-2018, 12:44 PM)Victor Wolfe Wrote: Link to topic: http://omniverse-rpg.com/showthread.php?tid=10216
Quest or Personal Storyline?: Personal storyline
Participating characters (please list): Gabriella (Demetri Mallus), Erik Vrell, Victor Wolfe, Valarie Wolfe
Total character count including spaces: Demtri: 12,532 characters Erik :3890 Victor:22298
Total word count : Demtri: 2380 Erik: 699 Victor: 4174
I award the Participation bonus to all participants.
I award the GREAT bonus to Victor Wolf
Victor Wolf OM Earned - 445.96
Demetri Malius OM Earned - 125.32
Erik Vrell OM Earned - 38.90
I am only grading Victor, but Demetri was excellent, and Erik as well, although neither wrote enough to qualify for a bonus. You guys write very well together, and I look forward to seeing more!
Mechanics: Spelling/Grammar/Ect - all looks fine!
Plot/Pacing: While you contrast with Demetri’s more casual style, it is not over-apparent and it seems to flow well. The plot evolves naturally enough, although like everyone else you are hurrying away to DA; maybe it would have been a longer thread without DA, but I am still excited to see your next chapter.
Characterization: Absolute top marks, crazy that I got to know so many characters so well in such a short time. Victor is a very compelling character off the bat. He has conflicting character traits, his anarchonistic mix of language styles is very charming, but Gabriella stole the show.
Gabrielle is really the star of this thread, and you and all the writers really did your best to make that apparent. The plucky little undeadish girl is already an instant classic.
Aesthetic/Creativity: Yes, and no. The thread was so full of plot and character developement that there wasn’t a lot of time for flowery descriptions, which is ok, because the pace of the thread didn’t exactly warrant it. On creativity though, that plotline was crazy and certainly unique.
Style: Verbose yet readable, and fast-paced. I really dig it.
Writing Chemistry - Lots, I hope you guys write more together! Demetri’s casual style is refreshing with Victor’s more dramatic style.
EDIT: Visioned