06-07-2018, 03:15 AM
Hi Felix! Welcome to the Omniverse. There are a few items that need fixing up before we can approve your character.
- Your character history could do with some fleshing out. Could you put a little more detail into what the UNSC is, who they fought and why he left? Also mention at what point in his life that Felix was taken from his universe.
- Your moves are fine for the most part but I need a few specifics:
-- Combat Knife: how long is the blade?
-- Handgun: how many rounds does the gun have? How fast can he fire the rounds? How much extra ammunition does Felix have on him? What is the gun's effective range?
-- Light Shield: how fast can Felix summon this? Also the strength of the shield is dependent on your DEF stat rather than being a part of the move itself.
Also by my count you have used 4000 of your 5000 starting OM. You are free to hold onto that extra 1000 and save it for something later if you wish.
- Your character history could do with some fleshing out. Could you put a little more detail into what the UNSC is, who they fought and why he left? Also mention at what point in his life that Felix was taken from his universe.
- Your moves are fine for the most part but I need a few specifics:
-- Combat Knife: how long is the blade?
-- Handgun: how many rounds does the gun have? How fast can he fire the rounds? How much extra ammunition does Felix have on him? What is the gun's effective range?
-- Light Shield: how fast can Felix summon this? Also the strength of the shield is dependent on your DEF stat rather than being a part of the move itself.
Also by my count you have used 4000 of your 5000 starting OM. You are free to hold onto that extra 1000 and save it for something later if you wish.
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