06-04-2018, 02:42 AM
@Demetri: I guess I wasn't being clear, sorry.
What I was trying to say was that you could upgrade the maximum range/length of your tendrils (mentioned in the first paragraph) from 10m to 15m if you wanted.
Anyway, the pillar bit looks fine. Just put everything all together and throw back in the maximum time for keeping someone pinned (which seems to have been lost in edits), then I think it'll mostly be good for approval. (And, as I noted earlier, you can change the 10m in the first paragraph to 15m, if you want)
Lastly, in the first paragraph, I think you should spell out that dispelling the tendrils lets you reclaim them. Because "dispell" sorta sounds more like destroying them, imo. "but to dispel two traps that each take three, it takes six seconds" and shouldn't this be nine seconds? 3 seconds per tendril and 3 tendrils, 3*3 = 9.
What I was trying to say was that you could upgrade the maximum range/length of your tendrils (mentioned in the first paragraph) from 10m to 15m if you wanted.
Anyway, the pillar bit looks fine. Just put everything all together and throw back in the maximum time for keeping someone pinned (which seems to have been lost in edits), then I think it'll mostly be good for approval. (And, as I noted earlier, you can change the 10m in the first paragraph to 15m, if you want)
Lastly, in the first paragraph, I think you should spell out that dispelling the tendrils lets you reclaim them. Because "dispell" sorta sounds more like destroying them, imo. "but to dispel two traps that each take three, it takes six seconds" and shouldn't this be nine seconds? 3 seconds per tendril and 3 tendrils, 3*3 = 9.