05-21-2018, 01:20 PM
(05-16-2018, 10:53 AM)Yu Kanda Wrote: The Black Order
Quest or Personal Storyline? Personal
Participating characters:
Yu Kanda / Klaud Nine
Marcus Wright
Koal
Total character count including spaces:
Yu Kanda/ Klaud Nine: 69576 characters
Marcus Wright: 8522 characters
Koal: 7102 characters
Total word count :
Yu Kanda / Klaud Nine: 12499 Words.
Marcus Wright: 1569 words
Koal: 1263
You all get participation and Kanda I'm giving you a Great Bonus, with my reasoning down below. If you would a more in depth critique, let me know and I'll give you one.
[spoiler]
Overall your writing is very good, but one of my main critiques is that you tend to have long speeches for your characters that aren't meant to be monologues. This can make reading dialogue and banter between characters weird and a bit jarring. Some of your dialogue is also a bit weird especially when you are talking to someone. However, your most recent writing is far superior is a much nicer read. If all of the post had this qualitity I would give you an exemplary. Keep up the good work. [/spoiler]
Yu Kanda - Great Bonus - 696 + Participation -376
Marcus Wright - 85
Koal-71