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Move Creation Workshop
(04-14-2018, 10:06 PM)Rafael Esquivel Wrote: Dark Energon Burst Cutter (300,  Ranged, Remote Control Proficiency, Ranged Materialize Proficiency): 

Dark Energon Burst Cutter is an attack that takes Unicron about six seconds to power up during which time he cannot move at all. This can also be used by Rafael should he choose to do so. This creates three orbs of Dark Energon, each about the size of a Tennis Ball that he can use to attack his opponents. They also have 5 spinning blades on the sides of them, that are about 10 inches each  that can be used to damage an opponent. This has a 15 second cool down. In addition, the orbs are fragile. A single hit with any amount of power put behind it could shatter the orbs, and until all three are shattered, none can be remade, meaning the move could not be reused. Of course, the move also has another caveat, it’s got a range of 70 feet from Unicron when the move is used. It is also moderately taxing on his stamina to use. These can be materialized about 20 feet from him  and their paths can be controlled by Rafael, or Unicron. This requires a small amount of his focus, but he can charge, and use other moves while using Dark Energon Burst Cutter so long as the other move does not need all of his concentration. This travels at the speed of an arrow for Rafael, and also for Unicron. 

The Narwhal Song [Please add in the powers and proficiencies you need, as well as the cost.]

The Narwhal Song is something that Rafael remembered from his world, and considered annoying. When you combine that with Unicron's power 
of telepathy, and his annoyance at being in the Omniverse at general, it's become a new attack of theirs. It takes roughly 8 seconds during which he cannot attack, but is free to dodge, and perform other simple actions. As long as his Tec, and that of Unicron is superior to that of an oppoment he can flood the world of his opponent with nothing but narwhals, driving them up the wall, and making them beg for it to stop because in addition to the Narwhals, their world is also being flooded by the song. It is to the point where it would make them barely even able to perform basic moves, or dodges. This lasts either 12 seconds, or until all the Narwhals are destroyed [how many Narwhals are there?], or until Rafael switches to a new move [does this include swords and basic attacks? I'd just say "whenever he stops concentrating on it" or something], whichever is the shortest. The move does not require that Rafael aim anything, simply that he look in the direction of his opponent, which is what triggers the move.  There is more to the attack than that, though. For you see, Unicron does not just loathe being in the Omniverse, he's quite angry. This is reflected by the Narwhals attacking the individuals. However, this is a telepathic assault, with a unique caveat. If the opponent flinches, they receive the damage they would if, if it had been an actual attack [you cut out the mention of the damage doing nothing if someone knows it's an illusion, is that still the case? does it work differently now or was that accidental?]. The person pictures the Narwhals attacking them, and suffers damage as a result, really pitiful damage per hit, each Narwhal being able to do 3 hits before they disappear [how much damage do you expect this to do in total, considering ever Narwhal and every hit?]. If a Narwhal is attacked it will dissipate, and reform about 3 seconds later unless someone destroys all of them at once, in which case they would not reform, as Rafael would have to spend the time to recharge the move immediately. 

(04-14-2018, 10:40 PM)Rafael Esquivel Wrote: The Dark Energon Dagger (Physical Strength, Ranged, Master Acrobat [I can't see why this would need master acrobat]. 600): 

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The Dark Energon Dagger is a weapon that Unicron created out of Dark Energon. A short weapon [how short? how long is it?], that had a gray, and purple wrapped leather handle. The blade is made out of stone, and Dark Energon.  This dagger takes him about 10 seconds to manifest [does this require his concentration? can he move at the same time?]. It can clash with the likes of Lightsabers, and similar. However, that is not the only trick that Unicron has up Rafael's sleeve with this. See, these daggers are made to be lighter weight than the sword that Rafael normally wields, and thus more quickly able to be used. Two of them are hidden up each of his sleeves, and one in his boots, as well. Two are belted at his waist. They can be used as throwing weapons, and travel at the speed of an arrow. [Is there a limit to how many daggers he can have at once, because at the start you say he can make them]

Revised it some, but still working on more revisions for it. Also in recent post - fixed the Narwhal song, and everything. 


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