03-26-2018, 09:54 PM
(This post was last modified: 03-29-2018, 01:48 PM by The Humble Sage.
Edit Reason: adding a ludicrous amount of OM
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(03-18-2018, 05:51 AM)Takanomiya Hijiri Wrote: Thread Name: [M] Securing Northside?
Quest or Personal Storyline: Personal
Participating Characters: Takanomiya Hijiri
Total Word Count: 78,186 (according to WordCounter.net)
Total Character Count: 441,015 (according to WordCounter.net)
EDIT:
Also, I would like to request Recognition for Hijiri. Including the thread where I did the Hand of the Empire quest and my NPC thread (Hijiri wasn't actually in this one, so I dunno if it'll count, but all the characters involved do tie into his own story) I have now written a total of 109,127 words in Coruscant; more than twice the minimum requirement.
O_O
.... well then!
Some of the wind has gone out of my Critique and Criticism sails, but I do have a few short things to say.
- Stylistically, I have no strong objections or criticisms. In recognition of your accomplishment, have this complimentary festive party hat. *Straps a live badger to your head with a bungee cord*
-You do a good job of creating an environment rather than just dwelling on your characters, but your prose as a whole could stand to be a little more vivid. You bring locations together with details mentioned in passing - playing cards on a table for instance - but most of your references are visual. Don't be afraid to include other sensations more often in your writing.
-Good combat, but a little bland at times. I can follow the action well, but it lacks visceral impact.
Cool? Cool.
*sets off the Exemplary bonus mine you've been unsuspectingly standing on this entire time.*
Takanomiya Hijiri: + 8820.30
Someone will be along to... do that.
... Jesus fuck.
As for recognition, this isn't the place to request it. You post a thread in the Help Desk for that.
sagedit: the shipment of OM has been sent