03-26-2018, 08:59 PM
(This post was last modified: 03-26-2018, 10:07 PM by Jade Harley.)
(03-17-2018, 07:58 PM)Mordin Solus Wrote:(03-03-2018, 11:38 PM)Mordin Solus Wrote:Quote:The Empire
Hand of the Empire OR There Are No Lines OR Empire Justice (must choose one)
Requirements: Not affiliated with the Kingdom, Pokemon Liberation Front or Rebels.
Difficulty: Moderate (5000-10,000 words dependent on writing quality)
Reward: increased Influence with the Empire.
Scientist Salarian
Quest or Personal Storyline? Quest (There Are No Lines)
Participating characters (please list): Mordin Solus
Total character count including spaces: 62,810
Total word count: 11,309
Gentle bump.
I'd been meaning to read this for a while. Finally got the chance to finish it off the other day - although it was a more casual read. I'd nominate this for an Exemplary Bonus. And your quest is a success. There were a few odd errors, but I like your writing style and I found it an enjoyable read. As for the errors, it as mostly minor things, such as:
[spoiler]
Here's just a couple of things I found earlier on. It's mostly just words given a slightly wrong ending - stuff that's easy to mistype and harder to spot with basic spell check.
"This wasn't an unusual sight for him, but it seem awfully clustered for such a big city in an open space." (seemed)
"It stood taller then the skyscrapers surrounding it." (than)
"The city had showed itself to be a hub of wonders and curiosities that he wanted to explore." (shown)
"He told me something similiar." (similar)
There were at least one or two things like this per post, sometimes a few more. And they do break the immersion a little each time. That said, I did really feel like I got to know Mordrin pretty well after reading this, so the plot and characterisation bumped you up from the great I was originally debating giving you.[/spoiler]
Exemplary Bonus: 1256.20 OM
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