11-15-2017, 08:24 PM
(This post was last modified: 11-15-2017, 08:25 PM by Ebonywood Hellscythe.)
@Marisa:
Thief:
It reads a lot better. But I'm not sure about stealing an item from someone. Preventing someone from using moves is strong. So, on that note, I'd reject it as it stands. Needed concentration, and it being tiring, to keep someone else's sword isn't good enough in my opinion. Especially since some people only have one melee weapon.
So, in my opinion, you need the following additions:
>A clarification she can only steal move "items". Not artefacts or consumables.
>A statement that someone can resummon their weapon if they were normally able to do so (Marisa keeps her copy).
>A comment that someone can redraw their weapon by focusing for 5 seconds (or something similar), even if they wouldn't normally be able to.
And, if you do that, I'd let you remove the constant stamina drain for holding someone else's weapon.
If you disagree, you can try putting it in approval as it is, but personally, I'd reject it.
Berlin:
>Can she use other moves while pulling out the doll, or does it require her total concentration?
>30mph isn't really that fast. 3 SPD is all someone needs to run from that.
>Don't use numbers for Marisa's speed reduction, say "half speed" or "two-thirds speed" or something like that.
Thief:
It reads a lot better. But I'm not sure about stealing an item from someone. Preventing someone from using moves is strong. So, on that note, I'd reject it as it stands. Needed concentration, and it being tiring, to keep someone else's sword isn't good enough in my opinion. Especially since some people only have one melee weapon.
So, in my opinion, you need the following additions:
>A clarification she can only steal move "items". Not artefacts or consumables.
>A statement that someone can resummon their weapon if they were normally able to do so (Marisa keeps her copy).
>A comment that someone can redraw their weapon by focusing for 5 seconds (or something similar), even if they wouldn't normally be able to.
And, if you do that, I'd let you remove the constant stamina drain for holding someone else's weapon.
If you disagree, you can try putting it in approval as it is, but personally, I'd reject it.
Berlin:
>Can she use other moves while pulling out the doll, or does it require her total concentration?
>30mph isn't really that fast. 3 SPD is all someone needs to run from that.
>Don't use numbers for Marisa's speed reduction, say "half speed" or "two-thirds speed" or something like that.