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Strike of Doom (600):  Physical Proficiency 

Over the years of fighting the Fantastic Four and other various heroes, Doom has acquired superb skills in hand to hand combat. In accord to Doom's fighting skills, When forced to attack his target from close range, it only takes a second to Punch or grab his opponent or opponents. When Doom is readying himself for punching his enemies, his arms and hands are surrounded with green electricity. The punch does very mild damage to his targets. When Doom grabs ahold of his enemies he electrocutes them with the powerful electricity coursing through him which a heavy damage for a very short amount of time. Overusing this move, especially the grab, will tire Doom and force him to find cover and rest and charge his magic for at least 20 seconds.

No offense, but for such a move at physical contact range with no lasting debilitating effects, 20 seconds of uninterrupted rest seems like a huge drawback. Consider if your character in a fighting game had to wait for 20 whole seconds before doing something else after using what seems like a basic core ability a few times- when sometimes entire rounds can be decided in less than thirty. A simple statement of it draining him/his magical energy reserves much more for the heavier grab version as opposed to the lighter punch version should suffice, and if you must have the recharge, you should really consider shortening it.

Also, the first part of this move seems like total filler- IMO it should start directly at "When Doom is readying himself," or at least the first part should be changed to something more simple like "In physical combat, Doom uses his magic to enhance his punches and grabs." How long it takes to punch someone is determined by your speed, after all, so we shouldn't need to have it repeated in every move.

This is just what I noticed at a glance, so it's not the end all be all of move critiques, but it begs a mention.