09-14-2017, 07:50 AM
(09-13-2017, 08:08 PM)13-Jzall Wrote: Powder shot 300 OM, requires ranged proficiency and area attack proficiency: a version of the powder grenade but different enough to be a new move, 13 loads a special pellet into his gun and when it fires it lightly dusts the opponent with the fire dust which is about half the amount of the grenades. The area it reaches is around 1.5 meters squared sideways and 3 meters forward in a cone shape. It is almost impossible to miss if the enemy is close enough and the amount that they are covered by, 1/4 the amount of a powder grenade to 1/2 of a powder grenade, will depend on how far away they are. It is reasonably silent and can normally be used to burn down a wooden wall or door, this will take between 30 seconds and a minute for the door to be weak enough to kick down. It won’t deal any damage but follows the rules for 13’s powder grenade which means that any friction on the dust will cause it to burst into flames. 13 will have to exchange the entire barrel of his gun if he wants to switch the type of bullet between normal and powder which takes 5 seconds, it holds 5 bullets and takes 4 seconds to reload. The dust will fall off naturally after about 15 seconds without being set alight, if the dust is on fire then you will have to wait for it to burn out which takes 2 minutes and 15 seconds or you can brush it off which is easier if you brush it off as soon as possible. The fire is hot enough to cause burns but the degree of the burn changes with time, at 45 seconds it will cause a 1st degree burn, at 75 a 2nd degree burn and so on.
"which is about half the amount of the grenades"
I'd avoid describing your move based on other moves, where possible.
"1.5 meters squared sideways"
Square metres are a measure of area, yet 'sideways' implies this is a distance. Did you mean 1.5m wide, or is the base of the cone 1.5m^2 in area (which implies a ~0.7m radius or ~1.4m diameter)?
"any friction on the dust will cause it to burst into flames"
Could you describe some example ways that may cause this friction?
"2 minutes and 15 seconds"
That's a long time. It's good you have to reload to change the ammo back, but 5 shots to do so for setting someone on fire for minutes is a lot. I mean, you've got over 10 minutes of fire here.
"at 45 seconds it will cause a 1st degree burn, at 75 a 2nd-degree burn and so on"
So what's the pattern here? 45, 75, then what? 105? Is it a 30-second increase each time? If I were you, I wouldn't bother with that part, I'd simply say that it does steady damage over time.