09-11-2017, 03:06 AM
@Aqua: The powerup is good. For reference, I wouldn't bother shoving those in the move workshop (as Vis said a bit higher up) since the main thing about them is just numbers.
As for the move, to clarify: a needle thing comes out the floor and stabs them, like in the foot for example. And then they either get a debuff or some damage.
Comments:
Firstly, I'd remove the damage from the debuff part. Being poked by a needle is nothing, and it'll let you make the debuff a tad stronger in potency.
>As in, does this simply make everything they do more fatiguing than usual rather than causing a general stamina drain? It might help to have a clarification in the move to make it clearer if so.
>Does this debuff end abruptly at the end of the 6 seconds, or get reduced in effect towards the end before it stops? (Since the blood cells would be fighting the bots continuously.)
>How much quicker do they get tired?
>I'd like a visual description of the explosions success they're inside someone. Would the target just feel a burning sensation in the area they got jabbed? Or would this be visible to Aqua? Or what?
>If the needle stab misses when Aqua intends to make the nanobots do damage, does this count as a usage?
As for the move, to clarify: a needle thing comes out the floor and stabs them, like in the foot for example. And then they either get a debuff or some damage.
Comments:
Firstly, I'd remove the damage from the debuff part. Being poked by a needle is nothing, and it'll let you make the debuff a tad stronger in potency.
Quote:This attack takes two seconds for Aquamarine to unleash,>Two seconds to stab someone? Two seconds to charge the pointy thing, and then have it appear near instantly? Can Aqua move during this time?
Quote:As the nanobots take root in her opponent's blood, they cause the opponent to lose stamina at a quicker rate than usual, causing them to get tired quicker than most people, though the nanobots only last 6 seconds before being destroyed by white blood cells.>Does this mean, if the target stands still being lazy, they won't feel the effects much?
>As in, does this simply make everything they do more fatiguing than usual rather than causing a general stamina drain? It might help to have a clarification in the move to make it clearer if so.
>Does this debuff end abruptly at the end of the 6 seconds, or get reduced in effect towards the end before it stops? (Since the blood cells would be fighting the bots continuously.)
>How much quicker do they get tired?
Quote:Aquamarine can also choose to blow up the nanobots as soon as they enter the bloodstream,>Medium damage is likely too much for an attack with a 2 second charge time that's basically always going to hit (since you make it under a foes feet). If you made the damaging version really tiring you could probably get the medium damage though.
>I'd like a visual description of the explosions success they're inside someone. Would the target just feel a burning sensation in the area they got jabbed? Or would this be visible to Aqua? Or what?
>If the needle stab misses when Aqua intends to make the nanobots do damage, does this count as a usage?