(08-08-2017, 06:32 AM)Gardevoir Wrote: Link to topic: The Fate of Feelings
Quest or Personal Storyline
Participating characters (please list): Gardevoir(Me), and Umbreon(Secondary to Dust)
Total character count including spaces(according to Wordcounter.net)
Gardevoir: 11,069
Umbreon: 7,725
Total word count(According to Wordcounter.net)
Gardevoir: 2,083
Umbreon: 1,391
What! You guys are abandoning Cinnabar to Darkling infestations? How heartless!
From a writing standpoint it was on the whole good. You both want to watch your consistency. Gardevoir, you switched from first to third person sometimes between sentences, which can confuse people quickly. Likewise Dust, you were sometimes calling Eclipse a she, and sometimes an it. Other than that, it was solid enjoyable writing from both of you.
Gardevoir: 110.69 OM
Dust: 77.3 OM
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