08-02-2017, 04:17 AM
(This post was last modified: 08-02-2017, 03:09 PM by Ebonywood Hellscythe.
Edit Reason: Veritas owes me a cookie
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Veritas, I'm one person. Don't throw lots of moves at me at once. Only work on a couple a time in the future.
Edit: Apparently, the moves you posted moves here that were already approved. I am staring at you disapprovingly right now. Scrap all the following stuff if you want I guess. Although I'm convinced my point about the shield strength being 10000 times weaker for a 100x100 shield compared to a 1x1 shield is correct and should be noted.
Original feedback (it was brief because you gave me a lot of stuff and I wanted to sort out any basics first):
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Also, a lot of basic information is needed. Be specific. What effects are on Veritas while he summons? How long does it take (min if applicable, and maximum)? Ranges, speeds and charge times have often been missed. You need to give a general upper bound, and likely a lower one.
Construct:
>Needs details on summoning.
>My advice, scrap it. This is literally just telekinesis at a longer range with some fodder attached. Get telekinesis instead.
>If you already have it or really want this move, perhaps use the hardlight things as an extension of your telekinetic powers to allow heavier objects to be lifted at the max range. It'll need drawbacks though.
Weapons:
>Need summoning info.
Blast:
>Needs all the basic information I tell you most times. Read the first post of the main move approval thread. I'm here to help you make moves, and I will do that, but I don't want to have to repeat the same things every single time. Especially when you're going to throw 6 moves at me (or whoever wants to handle them) at once. To specify, that's range, laser speed, charge times.
>Needs summoning info.
Shield:
>Your maths is wrong. A 1x1 shield is 100² (10000) times stronger than a 100x100 wall. It'd be based on area.
>Needs summoning details (times!)
Tethers:
>Why is this 600 OM?
>Needs summoning details.
>Range and speed
>How many can he have?
Grab:
>Range and speed
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Edit: Apparently, the moves you posted moves here that were already approved. I am staring at you disapprovingly right now. Scrap all the following stuff if you want I guess. Although I'm convinced my point about the shield strength being 10000 times weaker for a 100x100 shield compared to a 1x1 shield is correct and should be noted.
Original feedback (it was brief because you gave me a lot of stuff and I wanted to sort out any basics first):
[spoiler]
Also, a lot of basic information is needed. Be specific. What effects are on Veritas while he summons? How long does it take (min if applicable, and maximum)? Ranges, speeds and charge times have often been missed. You need to give a general upper bound, and likely a lower one.
Construct:
>Needs details on summoning.
>My advice, scrap it. This is literally just telekinesis at a longer range with some fodder attached. Get telekinesis instead.
>If you already have it or really want this move, perhaps use the hardlight things as an extension of your telekinetic powers to allow heavier objects to be lifted at the max range. It'll need drawbacks though.
Weapons:
>Need summoning info.
Blast:
>Needs all the basic information I tell you most times. Read the first post of the main move approval thread. I'm here to help you make moves, and I will do that, but I don't want to have to repeat the same things every single time. Especially when you're going to throw 6 moves at me (or whoever wants to handle them) at once. To specify, that's range, laser speed, charge times.
>Needs summoning info.
Shield:
>Your maths is wrong. A 1x1 shield is 100² (10000) times stronger than a 100x100 wall. It'd be based on area.
>Needs summoning details (times!)
Tethers:
>Why is this 600 OM?
>Needs summoning details.
>Range and speed
>How many can he have?
Grab:
>Range and speed
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