07-28-2017, 10:50 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-28-2017, 11:23 AM by Ebonywood Hellscythe.)
@Xana:
Firstly, welcome to the club. I might have said it in chat at one point, I think you're fairly new, but no reason not to say it again.
Secondly, you've got a good basis for your move, but some key facts are also needed. Just basic things that stop it being ambiguous, an easy way to spot them is think "how could I misinterpret this" and "if I wanted to build this wall or sword or gun, what information would I need" For now, I'll try to help with the basics. Also, it's helpful if you repost the new version of the move with changes in bold.
>Describe the shield more for me. How tall is it? How much does it curve (e.g. semi-circle, quarter-circle, a third of a circle)? How wide is it?
>If the shield curves more than a little bit, having it be 1ft in front of Xana would make it be a bit cramped, so I'd suggest creating it further away, maybe 2 or 3ft (or just say an arm's length away).
>How long does the shield last if no one attacks it? Or does it just remain there for a while?
>You don't need physical attack for making a shield. But, if the shield is larger than 3ft by 3ft you need the area defense proficiency (consider this while deciding how big you want the wall to be, although Xana is taller than 3ft so she'd have to duck to hide behind it if you don't want to buy the area defense prof.)
>How strong is the shield? How easy is it for someone to break?
>Just to clarify, what happens to the shield if she moves?
Lastly, I've noticed you're on discord fairly often, if it's easier you can PM me on there. I know it can seem daunting. Also, it might be worth having a look at the first post of the move approval thread and other people's similar moves.
Firstly, welcome to the club. I might have said it in chat at one point, I think you're fairly new, but no reason not to say it again.
Secondly, you've got a good basis for your move, but some key facts are also needed. Just basic things that stop it being ambiguous, an easy way to spot them is think "how could I misinterpret this" and "if I wanted to build this wall or sword or gun, what information would I need" For now, I'll try to help with the basics. Also, it's helpful if you repost the new version of the move with changes in bold.
>Describe the shield more for me. How tall is it? How much does it curve (e.g. semi-circle, quarter-circle, a third of a circle)? How wide is it?
>If the shield curves more than a little bit, having it be 1ft in front of Xana would make it be a bit cramped, so I'd suggest creating it further away, maybe 2 or 3ft (or just say an arm's length away).
>How long does the shield last if no one attacks it? Or does it just remain there for a while?
>You don't need physical attack for making a shield. But, if the shield is larger than 3ft by 3ft you need the area defense proficiency (consider this while deciding how big you want the wall to be, although Xana is taller than 3ft so she'd have to duck to hide behind it if you don't want to buy the area defense prof.)
>How strong is the shield? How easy is it for someone to break?
>Just to clarify, what happens to the shield if she moves?
Lastly, I've noticed you're on discord fairly often, if it's easier you can PM me on there. I know it can seem daunting. Also, it might be worth having a look at the first post of the move approval thread and other people's similar moves.