07-28-2017, 09:26 AM
@Aqua:
I don't have a lot to say this time, so good job.
>Where you list the required proficiencies, make sure you write area attack (because there's two area proficiencies).
>How long does the move fire for? How long is Aquamarine firing the beam?
>It may help your chances of getting the move approved if you clarify that the targets can still twist their upper body and attack (but not move).
@Ash:
That's a pretty cool move. Good way to make use of foresight without needing a high SPD.
>I don't think you'll need to summon the shield "instantly". I have a possible suggestion that could be useful, if not then ignore it. You have a small amount of time before the attack hits, so instead she could summon it by channeling all the magic (or whatever) that she can into a shield during the very short amount of time before the attack actually hits. Then, once the attack "hits", the shield summons the split second prior. The practical difference of this is that the opponent probably won't anticipate a shield appearing. If you make a shield when you sense the attack, they'll see it before they hit it.
>I don't think you need the "adds TEC to DEF" thing. And having the shield breaking dependant on their ATK doesn't seem completely logical as the damage of an attack also varies based on charge time and such. Maybe instead have it block/deflect an attack of medium (or large) damage. The numbers aren't really needed. Insight would still be useful for this.
>What visibly happens to the shield if it blocks the attack? You never said how it would disappear. Does it shatter as well (but Ash is also pushed to safety) or does it fade away or just magically disappear?
>To clarify, it looks like she only has a cooldown if the shield was successful. Is that true? (If it's not, I don't see why you couldn't do that)
>Besides that, it seems good and could work as it is already. It's basically "I block one attack a minute that I couldn't dodge". Your version currently has the downside of if someone sees you make the shield, they may choose not to hit it and stop their attack. And then make use of you standing there to hit with a new attack. I reckon you should probably go with my suggestion as that way you have a charge time as a drawback instead (and also can't move during it). Your choice, the move is pretty good, hopefully I was helpful.
I don't have a lot to say this time, so good job.
>Where you list the required proficiencies, make sure you write area attack (because there's two area proficiencies).
>How long does the move fire for? How long is Aquamarine firing the beam?
>It may help your chances of getting the move approved if you clarify that the targets can still twist their upper body and attack (but not move).
@Ash:
That's a pretty cool move. Good way to make use of foresight without needing a high SPD.
>I don't think you'll need to summon the shield "instantly". I have a possible suggestion that could be useful, if not then ignore it. You have a small amount of time before the attack hits, so instead she could summon it by channeling all the magic (or whatever) that she can into a shield during the very short amount of time before the attack actually hits. Then, once the attack "hits", the shield summons the split second prior. The practical difference of this is that the opponent probably won't anticipate a shield appearing. If you make a shield when you sense the attack, they'll see it before they hit it.
>I don't think you need the "adds TEC to DEF" thing. And having the shield breaking dependant on their ATK doesn't seem completely logical as the damage of an attack also varies based on charge time and such. Maybe instead have it block/deflect an attack of medium (or large) damage. The numbers aren't really needed. Insight would still be useful for this.
>What visibly happens to the shield if it blocks the attack? You never said how it would disappear. Does it shatter as well (but Ash is also pushed to safety) or does it fade away or just magically disappear?
>To clarify, it looks like she only has a cooldown if the shield was successful. Is that true? (If it's not, I don't see why you couldn't do that)
>Besides that, it seems good and could work as it is already. It's basically "I block one attack a minute that I couldn't dodge". Your version currently has the downside of if someone sees you make the shield, they may choose not to hit it and stop their attack. And then make use of you standing there to hit with a new attack. I reckon you should probably go with my suggestion as that way you have a charge time as a drawback instead (and also can't move during it). Your choice, the move is pretty good, hopefully I was helpful.