01-13-2015, 05:48 PM
The Price of Freedom - A nice introduction post. 
I really liked the depiction of how the life of a Pokémon is like in their original universe, something that is rarely covered outside of humorous web comics. I also liked how Lopunny's circumstances had logical consequences on her self-esteem and her performance when suddenly thrust into a dangerous and/or unknown situation.
The one thing that I think could have been improved upon was the last two day waiting segment. Now, I understand if the author didn't want to waste too much time with that, but (IC-wise) two days is a rather long time in an almost featureless void such as the Nexus. As such, I think this part could have been better utilised, perhaps to explore some more of Lopunny's self-reflection and inner thoughts. For example, she could have wondered how to even tell how much time has passed in a place where it's difficult to determine that, why did she have to wait two days and whether or not she should even follow the Medicham's instructions in the first place. It also could have been used to depict how Lopunny is coping with having to act on her own agency rather than her trainer's.
Other than that, it was an enjoyable read and I'm interested what the author has in store for us in the future.
I really liked the depiction of how the life of a Pokémon is like in their original universe, something that is rarely covered outside of humorous web comics. I also liked how Lopunny's circumstances had logical consequences on her self-esteem and her performance when suddenly thrust into a dangerous and/or unknown situation.The one thing that I think could have been improved upon was the last two day waiting segment. Now, I understand if the author didn't want to waste too much time with that, but (IC-wise) two days is a rather long time in an almost featureless void such as the Nexus. As such, I think this part could have been better utilised, perhaps to explore some more of Lopunny's self-reflection and inner thoughts. For example, she could have wondered how to even tell how much time has passed in a place where it's difficult to determine that, why did she have to wait two days and whether or not she should even follow the Medicham's instructions in the first place. It also could have been used to depict how Lopunny is coping with having to act on her own agency rather than her trainer's.
Other than that, it was an enjoyable read and I'm interested what the author has in store for us in the future.
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