07-14-2017, 02:44 AM
(This post was last modified: 07-14-2017, 02:45 AM by Ebonywood Hellscythe.)
Orbital Ring
>Does the "gravity" only effect objects? As in, is it literally just telekinesis that you're calling gravity or will larger objects drift towards you slowly and other people feel a pull?
>How fast do the objects orbit? 50mph?
>Does she need to constantly focus on the shield? Or is it fire and forget? The same goes for the attack.
>Why does it take 5 seconds to repair but 1 second to start initial?
>Is there anything stopping you from just making a new shield in 1 second instead?
>You realise bullets probably count as a piercing attack. The same might go for lasers and blasters. Probably arrows. That'd be most ranged attacks that can still hit you or lunch through the shield easily.
>If you take damage, can you just pick the shield up a second later regardless?
>Suggestion: have the shield slowly build up and get stronger over the course of 5 seconds. Most people have simple shield moves and even those usually require 2 seconds of charging up. So, maybe "she focuses for 1 second. Then, rubble, trash, and other loose materials begin to collect around her in an orbit. It takes 5 seconds for the orbit to fill completely. If damaged, it can take a number of seconds proportional to how much of the orbit was damage to repair it, although if Aquamarine is hurt the orbit is dropped completely. Initially building or repairing the shield is more draining than simply maintaining it." Something like that. But maybe in your own words.
>While obvious, you might want to spell out that any idiot who runs into the orbit of trash will probably get hurt.
Tears:
>I would add that it might disrupt vision.
>If she can choose who to divide the stat loss between, then say so in the move.
>I'm not sure on this, but if your aim is to reduce stats, you should probably just make a single target move. For this I think it might be better to just write your debuffs in general terms. Look at Madbull's tear gas move for example.
Conductor:
>1ft in diameter? Not length? I was picturing her pointing a metal bar at someone. But maybe I'm wrong.
>Does the "gravity" only effect objects? As in, is it literally just telekinesis that you're calling gravity or will larger objects drift towards you slowly and other people feel a pull?
>How fast do the objects orbit? 50mph?
>Does she need to constantly focus on the shield? Or is it fire and forget? The same goes for the attack.
>Why does it take 5 seconds to repair but 1 second to start initial?
>Is there anything stopping you from just making a new shield in 1 second instead?
>You realise bullets probably count as a piercing attack. The same might go for lasers and blasters. Probably arrows. That'd be most ranged attacks that can still hit you or lunch through the shield easily.
>If you take damage, can you just pick the shield up a second later regardless?
>Suggestion: have the shield slowly build up and get stronger over the course of 5 seconds. Most people have simple shield moves and even those usually require 2 seconds of charging up. So, maybe "she focuses for 1 second. Then, rubble, trash, and other loose materials begin to collect around her in an orbit. It takes 5 seconds for the orbit to fill completely. If damaged, it can take a number of seconds proportional to how much of the orbit was damage to repair it, although if Aquamarine is hurt the orbit is dropped completely. Initially building or repairing the shield is more draining than simply maintaining it." Something like that. But maybe in your own words.
>While obvious, you might want to spell out that any idiot who runs into the orbit of trash will probably get hurt.
Tears:
>I would add that it might disrupt vision.
>If she can choose who to divide the stat loss between, then say so in the move.
>I'm not sure on this, but if your aim is to reduce stats, you should probably just make a single target move. For this I think it might be better to just write your debuffs in general terms. Look at Madbull's tear gas move for example.
Conductor:
>1ft in diameter? Not length? I was picturing her pointing a metal bar at someone. But maybe I'm wrong.