07-13-2017, 01:54 AM
Disclaimer: I am a noob.
@Aqua
Blinding Ball
>Can Aquamarine be blinded by her own attack?
>What's the range?
>How long does the blinding effect last?
>Why does it cost 600OM? I can't see and variability in the move.
@Ash
Thunder Clap
>I'd base the knockback about their DEF compared to your ATK (although I don't know if you'd need to) and change the wording so it says up to 10ft.
>You said the effects decrease at range. Is there a soft cap of sorts? Say at 30ft for example where the move basically does nothing? Or is this only for close range? You listed physical as a proficiency for this and not range.
>You might need to specify some times. How long does it take to do the largest clap? The smallest one?
>You may wish to add some description to what the sound wave looks like and any other visual effects.
Chain Lightning
>Area is for attacks with splash damage. Since this is one well controlled projectile, you'd need ranged control if you want to divert it mid flight. Although, since you said it's pre-planned, that would mean anyone that moves in range after the bolt has been fired wouldn't get hit? I think you might actually need homing (if not ranged control) for it to zig-zag across a group of people, as the targets will likely move after you've fired the spell so it can't all be pre-planned besides the general direction.
>How fast does it travel?
>If there any delay before if moves to the next person?
>You may have/want to specify a drop in damage for later targets.
>Can it hit the same person twice?
>Why is this 900OM? There's only one thing it can do, and the only variability is the number of targets. Reasonably you might get it for 300OM unless I misunderstood something.
Storm Demon
>Awesome sauce
@Aqua
Blinding Ball
>Can Aquamarine be blinded by her own attack?
>What's the range?
>How long does the blinding effect last?
>Why does it cost 600OM? I can't see and variability in the move.
@Ash
Thunder Clap
>I'd base the knockback about their DEF compared to your ATK (although I don't know if you'd need to) and change the wording so it says up to 10ft.
>You said the effects decrease at range. Is there a soft cap of sorts? Say at 30ft for example where the move basically does nothing? Or is this only for close range? You listed physical as a proficiency for this and not range.
>You might need to specify some times. How long does it take to do the largest clap? The smallest one?
>You may wish to add some description to what the sound wave looks like and any other visual effects.
Chain Lightning
>Area is for attacks with splash damage. Since this is one well controlled projectile, you'd need ranged control if you want to divert it mid flight. Although, since you said it's pre-planned, that would mean anyone that moves in range after the bolt has been fired wouldn't get hit? I think you might actually need homing (if not ranged control) for it to zig-zag across a group of people, as the targets will likely move after you've fired the spell so it can't all be pre-planned besides the general direction.
>How fast does it travel?
>If there any delay before if moves to the next person?
>You may have/want to specify a drop in damage for later targets.
>Can it hit the same person twice?
>Why is this 900OM? There's only one thing it can do, and the only variability is the number of targets. Reasonably you might get it for 300OM unless I misunderstood something.
Storm Demon
>Awesome sauce