07-12-2017, 11:48 PM
Taking your advice on breaking it down, I can see how it looked cluttered and confusing. If this is looking a little "meh" I can dial it back to something simple.
Electrokinesis - 900 OM (Requires: Ranged Proficiency, Ranged Materialize Proficiency, Remote-Control Proficiency, Area Attack Proficiency)
Shū doesn’t draw in electricity from the air or generate it from his physical body. He taps into the raging god locked away inside of him to bring forth bolts of lightning and the crackling of electricity. It takes only a moment for Shū to summon electricity around his body and his immediate vicinity. This move has the following effects and weaknesses:
• Walking Current: Can be used for mundane purposes, such as lighting a fire or illuminating dark areas.
• Electrical Strike: He can lash out with a streak of electricity, at a maximum of 80 ft. The farther the streak extends, the weaker it is in power. This attack is highly inaccurate though he can use this every 2-3 minutes.
• Electric Nova: He can create an expanding electrical ring at a maximum of a 30 ft. radius, weakening as it extends. This requires a build up, leaving him vulnerable for a minute. He can use this every 7 minutes.
• Flash Counter: There is a constant charge surrounding him, offering an immediate counter attack of electricity if he is attacked. However, this will only occur if he has not used Electrokinesis for anything else. This counter only works once, like a static discharge, and will require him to wait a full 30 minutes to use Electrokinesis again.
• Time Limit: He can keep this ability activated for a maximum of 15 minutes and exceeding that time will cause massive feedback, incapacitating him. If this ability is deactivated, he requires approximately 30 minutes to recharge.
• Future Requirements: This ability is a prerequisite to use more advanced moves, which must be purchased separately.
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I wasn't sure I could have him summon more arrows that quickly, I thought Primes could only summon stuff at a minimum of 3 minutes. Made the changes here.
Bow and Arrows - 300 OM (Requires: Ranged Proficiency)
A wooden bow, lovingly crafted and polished smooth. The string is of a silken make, waxed and practically immune to snapping. A leather grip wrap encompasses the center of the wooden limb, accompanied by bone weights at the ends to provide greater stabilization. Each arrow is of equal craftsmanship, 20 in a leather-bound quiver, and Shū can replenish the quiver with two arrows per second. All arrow heads are made of glass-stone, symbols of spirit banishment etched into each one. He can fire off one arrow at a time in approximately one second at a maximum distance of 1000 yards depending on the trajectory of the arrow. The average arrow travels at about 150 mph in a straight line, that speed slows significantly (reduced to 30-60mph) if the arrow is fired at an arc to attain maximum distance.
Electrokinesis - 900 OM (Requires: Ranged Proficiency, Ranged Materialize Proficiency, Remote-Control Proficiency, Area Attack Proficiency)
Shū doesn’t draw in electricity from the air or generate it from his physical body. He taps into the raging god locked away inside of him to bring forth bolts of lightning and the crackling of electricity. It takes only a moment for Shū to summon electricity around his body and his immediate vicinity. This move has the following effects and weaknesses:
• Walking Current: Can be used for mundane purposes, such as lighting a fire or illuminating dark areas.
• Electrical Strike: He can lash out with a streak of electricity, at a maximum of 80 ft. The farther the streak extends, the weaker it is in power. This attack is highly inaccurate though he can use this every 2-3 minutes.
• Electric Nova: He can create an expanding electrical ring at a maximum of a 30 ft. radius, weakening as it extends. This requires a build up, leaving him vulnerable for a minute. He can use this every 7 minutes.
• Flash Counter: There is a constant charge surrounding him, offering an immediate counter attack of electricity if he is attacked. However, this will only occur if he has not used Electrokinesis for anything else. This counter only works once, like a static discharge, and will require him to wait a full 30 minutes to use Electrokinesis again.
• Time Limit: He can keep this ability activated for a maximum of 15 minutes and exceeding that time will cause massive feedback, incapacitating him. If this ability is deactivated, he requires approximately 30 minutes to recharge.
• Future Requirements: This ability is a prerequisite to use more advanced moves, which must be purchased separately.
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I wasn't sure I could have him summon more arrows that quickly, I thought Primes could only summon stuff at a minimum of 3 minutes. Made the changes here.
Bow and Arrows - 300 OM (Requires: Ranged Proficiency)
A wooden bow, lovingly crafted and polished smooth. The string is of a silken make, waxed and practically immune to snapping. A leather grip wrap encompasses the center of the wooden limb, accompanied by bone weights at the ends to provide greater stabilization. Each arrow is of equal craftsmanship, 20 in a leather-bound quiver, and Shū can replenish the quiver with two arrows per second. All arrow heads are made of glass-stone, symbols of spirit banishment etched into each one. He can fire off one arrow at a time in approximately one second at a maximum distance of 1000 yards depending on the trajectory of the arrow. The average arrow travels at about 150 mph in a straight line, that speed slows significantly (reduced to 30-60mph) if the arrow is fired at an arc to attain maximum distance.